tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post2966504136244446023..comments2023-11-25T19:55:38.162-05:00Comments on <b>Chelle Cordero, Author</b>: At First Glance - Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 11/30/14Chelle Corderohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15412268726863698528noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-14927959890204049042014-12-04T23:49:41.309-05:002014-12-04T23:49:41.309-05:00It left me wondering what happens next--and that&#...It left me wondering what happens next--and that's a good thing. :-) <br /><br />I caught the head-hopping, too. A wee bit disorienting, but maybe it's just me. It didn't seem to phase any of the other readers. <br /><br />Good story, Chelle!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-22613819880557793232014-11-30T20:57:33.682-05:002014-11-30T20:57:33.682-05:00The solider is very bold with the staring and then...The solider is very bold with the staring and then walking up to her. All it takes is a simple hello. Looking forward to seeing if they complete the conversation or if something happens with the prisoner.Meka Jameshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04592225193233705022noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-17309629867214727292014-11-30T18:45:47.855-05:002014-11-30T18:45:47.855-05:00Felt like I was right there. I guess looking away ...Felt like I was right there. I guess looking away wasn't going to stop him from talking to her. lol Karen Michelle Nutthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04083893569523248900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-17602852003661558532014-11-30T18:26:43.227-05:002014-11-30T18:26:43.227-05:00Hi Chelle! I like the tension that you created he...Hi Chelle! I like the tension that you created here. Jeanette seems intrigued by this guy. Great eight!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09436256293259964125noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-55755610194903122772014-11-30T17:37:11.257-05:002014-11-30T17:37:11.257-05:00There is so much more I want to know! Very enigmat...There is so much more I want to know! Very enigmatic piece and already a great sense of tension between the two protagonists. WonderfulAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08242815035131152082noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-3454348679736650022014-11-30T17:32:52.766-05:002014-11-30T17:32:52.766-05:00Though he probably means well, I can well understa...Though he probably means well, I can well understand her unease at his approaching her. He better have something good to say if he doesn't want to scare her off!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-58796385046025128642014-11-30T15:22:29.507-05:002014-11-30T15:22:29.507-05:00And meanwhile I'm wondering what's going o...And meanwhile I'm wondering what's going on with the prisoner from last week, so obviously this story has my attention all the way! Enjoyed the snippet, felt like I was right there, watching them!Veronica Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04732940088047026021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-53870608388934512402014-11-30T13:36:52.977-05:002014-11-30T13:36:52.977-05:00Intriguing set-up. I wonder why Jeanette doesn'...Intriguing set-up. I wonder why Jeanette doesn't walk away. Her friend is on the train, so she could leave, but she isn't...Great 8.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-66975512774844094452014-11-30T11:53:48.510-05:002014-11-30T11:53:48.510-05:00Thanks Charmaine!
Hi Millie, I have to go back an...Thanks Charmaine!<br /><br />Hi Millie, I have to go back and re-read the story with the POV in mind. As for the goodbye, last week's snippet was a conversation between Jeannette and her friend - her friend is going to take care of an ill mother. Thanks for the heads up.<br />Chelle Corderohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15412268726863698528noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-67631186235890340162014-11-30T11:43:44.423-05:002014-11-30T11:43:44.423-05:00You bounce from his thoughts to her thoughts in th...You bounce from his thoughts to her thoughts in this snippet. Do you do that throughout the story? I want to know who is saying goodbye to whom and why... Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05551671528722336812noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-5433332224758313872014-11-30T10:21:06.373-05:002014-11-30T10:21:06.373-05:00You grabbed me from the first sentence and didn...You grabbed me from the first sentence and didn't let me go. I was in the station watching the scene. Chelle, your many faces captured me.Charmaine Gordonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15236373312231763983noreply@blogger.com