tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post1298356866473177352..comments2023-11-25T19:55:38.162-05:00Comments on <b>Chelle Cordero, Author</b>: Always One More Time, 1st snippet ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / 8sunday / 01/24/16Chelle Corderohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15412268726863698528noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-30168542775250127852016-01-31T01:05:28.113-05:002016-01-31T01:05:28.113-05:00I like how you use the images of cold and being fr...I like how you use the images of cold and being frozen to mirror what she's feeling inside. Neat trick!JTsuruokahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05173187123835069767noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-54870556618641160672016-01-27T00:24:27.612-05:002016-01-27T00:24:27.612-05:00I wonder why she's so nervous to be here, and ...I wonder why she's so nervous to be here, and why she's here at all. Very curious. <br /><br />And this line right here sounds SOOOOO much like one of my characters! I love it: “Now or never,” Callie spoke to herself, “if you stand here any longer, your feet will be frozen in place, literally.”Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-68901145085523869082016-01-25T12:13:38.221-05:002016-01-25T12:13:38.221-05:00I can't wait to see who or what's waiting ...I can't wait to see who or what's waiting for her on the otherside. Ceciliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07076648307785084672noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-72899943082574104482016-01-24T18:11:39.441-05:002016-01-24T18:11:39.441-05:00I'm not sure why she's so apprehensive, bu...I'm not sure why she's so apprehensive, but I sure like that last line.Elaine Cantrellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05668294337075373288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-68190724688536023422016-01-24T18:04:47.568-05:002016-01-24T18:04:47.568-05:00I love all those little delaying tactics. I've...I love all those little delaying tactics. I've done a few of them myself, a time or two--now what will she do when someone answers the knock?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18141508426287090331noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-87162381810617507702016-01-24T15:16:26.120-05:002016-01-24T15:16:26.120-05:00Sometimes we just have pull ourselves up by our bo...Sometimes we just have pull ourselves up by our boostraps and forge ahead. Good snippet, Chelle. :)Siobhan Muirhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13653107467839760917noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-65326437391613533602016-01-24T14:31:47.985-05:002016-01-24T14:31:47.985-05:00Loved the last line! Really get a sense of her alr...Loved the last line! Really get a sense of her already! Great snippet!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13837948914402096224noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-16608259193597844792016-01-24T13:21:06.055-05:002016-01-24T13:21:06.055-05:00Poor Callie, she must really not want to be there....Poor Callie, she must really not want to be there. I thought you very effectively portrayed her state of mind and reluctance...and left all of us with questions! Great snippet.Veronica Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04732940088047026021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-14429282355638751802016-01-24T12:10:25.765-05:002016-01-24T12:10:25.765-05:00And here comes the story. Exciting and wonderful, ...And here comes the story. Exciting and wonderful, I'm sure.Charmaine Gordonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15236373312231763983noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-24152150487933432992016-01-24T12:03:30.838-05:002016-01-24T12:03:30.838-05:00This is such a good snippet, Chelle. You pulled me...This is such a good snippet, Chelle. You pulled me in. I was looking over her shoulder. The attention to detail, like how she counted the steps--all of the ways we delay something we're dreading. Nice!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-46403868121023128612016-01-24T11:12:36.105-05:002016-01-24T11:12:36.105-05:00This is just dripping with tension and really make...This is just dripping with tension and really makes me want to know the reason for her dread. Looking forward to next week!<br /><br />~Joyce ScarbroughThe Belle in Bluehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16368021976814668783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-23923156276590474612016-01-24T10:02:34.026-05:002016-01-24T10:02:34.026-05:00I wonder why she's so reluctant to enter? You&...I wonder why she's so reluctant to enter? You've portrayed her hesitation very well!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00200483339139860998noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-2998111608216558792016-01-24T04:03:56.929-05:002016-01-24T04:03:56.929-05:00Oh wow, that last sentence raises a lot of questio...Oh wow, that last sentence raises a lot of questions! i'm intrigued!Iris Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07282988971025667976noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-87304906615231981772016-01-24T02:52:41.186-05:002016-01-24T02:52:41.186-05:00I agree with Ed, Chelle. Your last sentence is ver...I agree with Ed, Chelle. Your last sentence is very impactful! I can feel her reluctance.Kim Mhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08556808413747062433noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9126016220287748031.post-43812246562470644002016-01-23T23:15:06.809-05:002016-01-23T23:15:06.809-05:00Although I wonder why she hangs back, her hesitati...Although I wonder why she hangs back, her hesitation is clear. The last line is the best of all.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com