Saturday, March 29, 2014

Paige & Lon get closer - Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 03/30/14

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Welcome to a snippet from Bartlett's Rule, my first novel published with Vanilla Heart Publishing. Even though this piece is already published, I find receiving your comments helpful as I write future stories - you strengthen me when I know how well (or not) I communicate with my readers, and I learn what readers like and don't care for. I really appreciate you for giving me your time.

Paige has confided her past history to Lon and she's beginning to believe she can trust again. Obviously Paige is important to Lon and he is doing his best to let her know she is safe, he doesn't want to give her up. I've used creative punctuation again, but even so I am over by a sentence, so sorry:

“I want to sleep with you, the operative word being sleep; I would just like to hold you and wake up with you in my arms.”
“You’re willing to spend the night in bed with me and not get...”
“Yes,” he saw Paige glance nervously back at her bedroom, “have you ever just slept with a man, I mean, since Hal?”
She mouthed the word no as she shook her head.
“Tell you what, if at any point during the night you wake scared because I am next to you, just wake me; if my presence scares you, then I will get up and finish the night on your couch, you have my word, I know trust is a lot to ask for, but please Paige.”
“And you would really leave the bed if I woke you, you wouldn’t argue?”
“I would be disappointed, but I wouldn’t argue.”
“And we wouldn’t have sex?”
He smiled, “if you molested me I probably wouldn’t refuse you, but it would have to be your decision and it would always remain your right to say no and stop.”

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Bartlett's Rule shares the story of Lon and Paige's love affair; a romance filled with hardship, emotion, danger and triumph. Falling in love was never the challenge; being there for each other, knowing just what to say and making it work is the real test. Paige and Lon are real; they are human, they cry and they laugh. Paige has to learn to trust. Lon has to learn to be patient.
Smashwords (multiple e-book formats)
Amazon (Kindle, Print, Audio)
AllRomance E-books
Bartlett’s Rule was named one of
Carolyn Howard-Johnson’s 
Top Ten Reads for 2009
on MyShelf.com

Stop Abuse of Women
Interview with Chelle Cordero
Author of Bartlett's Rule 

Chelle Cordero joins Jeanine Swatton on BlogTalk Radio in discussing her novel, Bartlett's Rule. This is a story of a woman recovering from the devastating effects of rape while she learns to trust and fall in love again. The story explores the secondary victim challenges facing the man she meets (after the rape) and the effects on people around them.  10/28/2009

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12 comments:

frankmfisher.net said...

I like how Paige wants to make sure Lon will stay true to his word. He sounds good enough to me.

Charmaine Gordon said...

Again, I enjoy the dialogue, so natural and serious ending with a touch of humor. Lovely, Chelle.

Veronica Scott said...

I really like Lon and his patience, plus that sense of humor to lighten the very tense mood. He's clearly a keeper! Great snippet!

Sarah Cass said...

Lon is a good man for the task of earning her trust. I hope she figures out how.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

Sounds like he has done everything he possibly can to reassure her of his intentions... unless she has other ideas! Good scene.

A.S. Fenichel said...

Lon is so yummy! I adore him and I found myself rooting for him. Well done!

Dani Jace said...

Now there is a gentleman! Putting her needs above his desire. Nice! Very nice!

Millie Burns said...

He sounds like a wonderful man. Almost too good to be true. I'm sure that's what she's thinking...

Eleri Stone said...

I REALLY like Lon.

Sarah W said...

I like Lon's patience---and her nervousness is a very real touch. :)

homecomingbook said...

He certainly seems to be what she needs.

Teresa Cypher said...

After reading the snippet, an then reading the comments, I have to say that you've done an outstanding job of building his character in a short space. Very likeable. Nicely done, Chelle!