Monday, October 2, 2017

The First Page Review blog hop ~ Annie's Karma

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 from Annie's Karma


Prologue

“Okay. This is the last of the boxes. Now we can get out of this hell-hole.”
“Uh-huh.” Annie kept her back to him so he couldn’t see the tears on her cheeks.
“Hey, are you okay?” Dave put the box down and went to her. He put his arms around her middle and gently pulled her back against him. “Do you want to talk about it?”
“No.” She turned in his arms and wrapped her arms around his waist. “It’s stupid. I haven’t been living here for months… and I certainly wasn’t happy in this place.” She buried her face against his chest.
Dave could only remember that Annie almost died here. He glanced over her head and noted the bare walls and the hollow vacancy in front of him. Still, this had been her home and he had to remind himself of that. At some point he hoped she felt happy about moving in to this house, he wondered if she would ever remember that joy.
“I bet you had dreams, though, when Scott and you first moved in here.”
She shrugged in his embrace. “I used to be na├»ve.”
Dave felt only anger towards Scott and sadness for Annie. He hoped, sooner rather than later, that he could return some of that innocence to her. Sometimes Dave wondered if he could have lived with himself, if Annie would ever have forgiven him, if he had made sure that Scott hadn’t lived to go to trial, but that wasn’t the kind of law enforcement officer and not the kind of man he was. He only hoped that Annie could love him for that. He held her just a little bit tighter.
“I hope the next person who lives here makes it into a real home.” Annie sniffled and backed out of his arms. “I’m sorry, I don’t mean to be whiny.”
“You’re not being whiny.” He reached out and caught her chin with his fingertips. He tilted her face up to look at him and shrugged. “That’s beautiful of you to wish someone else happiness, especially someone you don’t know,” He narrowed his eyes, “Or do you?”

17 comments:

ARHuelsenbeck said...

Great opening! There is an unanswered question--what exactly did Scott do to Annie--that would drive me to turn the page. I gather Scott was her husband, and that he tried to murder her, but why?

Chelle Cordero said...

Hi Arhuel, you pose an interesting question. The answer of course is in the 1st book. Scott was after power and money and Annie was getting in his way. Since both books are already published I can't change this prologue but it does make me reconsider how much info I should release in the prologue. Thank you for being here.

raisya said...

a tense story

Chelle Cordero said...

Thank you. I hope the tension keeps you interested.

Unknown said...

I like how this was going, all wistful and sweet, until Dave asks a very pointed question. It raises quite a bit of mystery and I would definitely turn the page!

Chelle Cordero said...

Thank you Christina!

Hywela Lyn said...

Yes, I would definitely want to read on (and if I read the whole book, I'm pretty sure I'd want to read the first one, although I think you gave the 'backstory' pretty well in a few short pieces of dialogue!)

Botanist said...

Well, some intriguing questions right out the gate, and what a teaser right at the end of this segment!

Teresa Cypher said...

I'd read on, Chelle.

After I was about halfway through, I realized that I read the first book! I read a lot of books. I'd better check to see if I left a review. :-)

Welcome back!

Chelle Cordero said...

Thank you. I hope the action (& more background) in the 1st book would still keep a reader intrigued.

Chelle Cordero said...

Thanks Botanist, that is an encouraging comment.

Chelle Cordero said...

Thanks Teresa for both your comment and for reading Karma Visited. I really missed this group, things are improving around here - don't know if I'll be able to post every week but I am going to try when I can.

ulfah said...

good

zuzan said...

amazing

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