Welcome to a Weekend Writing Warriors snippet. Participants share 8 sentences of our writing, published or unpublished Everyone is welcome to leave a comment. See more at the WeWriWa blog.
Once more from Karma Visited, and yes, creative punctuation was used to make it fit:
She looked scared, “How can you see
me?”
He shook his head, “Come on, I’m not
playing games.” He looked at her and shook his head again, “This is some kind
of joke, isn’t it, they were all just pretending that you weren’t there, I’m
pissed because this wasn’t exactly the time to play games.”
“No,” she sounded hesitant, “no one
can see me, usually, no one except… the people I come to help and I don’t know
why you can see me, who are you?”
“Wha…?” He stopped himself and stared
at her, “Who are you, how is this happening? Wait a minute,” he stared in
silence as recognition dawned, “I’ve seen you before.”
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11 comments:
Ah, the first moment of recognition and what a beauty. More. I want more.Tantalizing eight. Thanks, Chelle.
Very intriguing, I want to know where he's seen her before and why she's denying it!
hum, maybe he also needs some help.
Wow, this leads to lots of questions!
LOVE this story, so cool. Today's excerpt was excellent!
Emma, remember my snippet last week http://bit.ly/1em6nE2 when Dave saw a mysterious woman that no one else saw? Could this be her?
Linda, you might be asking about the wrong person...
Charmaine, Millie and Veronica, so glad that you are enjoying this story.
Oh, wow...he can see her! There must be a reason for it. I can't wait to see more.
here's the big reveal. now its going to start clicking
Hi Sarah & Michelle, Yes this scene is quite the turning point in the story.
Oh that's an interesting twist--he can see her! I wonder what that means. They must be linked together somehow? Very good 8! I'm enjoying your story.
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