Saturday, December 28, 2013

A Chaunce of Riches continued - #WeWriWa 12/28/2013

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In this excerpt from A Chaunce of Riches, Ben has been doing his job protecting the woman he once loved, now a wealthy widow, and her young son from definite threats. He still is bitter about her betrayal and abandonment when he was at his most vulnerable. After several close "encounters", she has begged him for forgiveness and he has refused. One more serious heart-to-heart and they are both left hurting. Ben enters Sam's room late one night - uninvited. He obviously has been drinking.

            She was annoyed that he had frightened her, “What do you want to talk about?”
            Ben took her by the shoulders and turned her towards him, he squinted in the dark; Sam felt exposed under his gaze, “Is that a nightgown? How long is it?”
            “To my knees,” She still wasn’t convinced of his sobriety.
            He released her suddenly, “It’s not very sexy.”
            “Well excuse me, I didn’t know I had to dress for company,” She sounded indignant.
            He laughed, that feistiness was part of the old Sam, the Sam he had loved with all of his heart; then there was silence.
            Finally Sam sighed and relaxed beside him, “What did you want to talk about?”
            He looked at her in the dark, “You, me, sex, your husband, who killed him and who is trying to scare you?”

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The day that Ben Johnson was hired as a bodyguard for some rich widow and her kid, he never expected to be working for the woman who had abandoned him just when he had needed her the most so many years before. Damn it all, he still wanted her. Samantha Chaunce never thought she would see him again. She never thought she would have to explain why she married the rich man over the man she had sworn she once loved. And she certainly never expected to find out that her rich husband had been murdered and fingers were pointing to her former lover. 



13 comments:

Jess Schira said...

That last line is fantastic. Happy New Year!

Marcia said...

Ha! Well, he doesn't expect to have a short discussion, does he! Curious to see how Sam reacts to that.

Charmaine Gordon said...

Right to the point and what a shocker. Super eight. Happy HEALTHY New Year

Teresa Cypher said...

Haha! They have a lot of taking to do! Nicely done, Chelle. That last line is perfect! :-)

Veronica Scott said...

Awkward time and place to have such a serious conversation! That final line is wonderful, so intriguing...enjoying the story, great snippet!

Lauren said...

I love her snappy comment when she says she wasn't dressing for company. Love the fiestiness in that!

Millie Burns said...

Very fun eight. Made me worried at first he was going to do something he'd regret, but seems like he just wants some answers...

Michelle Howard said...

He's not asking for much is he? Hope her answers appease the hurt she caused.

Sarah Cass said...

Oh wow. What a situation. I wonder if they'll be able to work things out.

Kate said...

Well all of that could take a while. Great eight, Chelle! I love the dialogue!

Sue Ann Bowling said...

Quite a long list on short notice. (I'm here; just forgot to sign up.)

stevie-carroll said...

That's a lot of topics for them to cover!

Great eight.

Cindy Amrhein said...

That is one hell of a jam packed last line! Kind of cut right through the akwardness and got right to the point. Great snippet!

(PS thanks for the tour tip.)