Saturday, December 21, 2013

more from A Chaunce of Riches ~12/22/13 WEWRIWA

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As we continue with A Chaunce of Riches, Ben decides to stay and protect the wealthy Samantha Chaunce and her son even though his heart hasn't healed after her abandonment so many years before.

            Ben sat quietly and watched her, Sam tried to go back to reading.
            “So what happened to you Sam? I really thought we had the same values and the same dreams, when did money become so important to you?”
            She didn’t want to have to defend herself to him, it would be too easy to be swept up in a lie. Looking away from him, she barely whispered, “what makes you think it wasn’t important all along?” She hoped that he couldn’t read the regret in her eyes.
            “I thought I knew you better than anybody else just like I thought you knew me better; you were the only person I ever let get close to me.” He paused, “I thought our love was important to you.”


11 comments:

Linda said...

Ben seems to have done a lot of thinking, I wonder where he got lost on the way.

Jess Schira said...

Wow, there's a lot of undertone, and heartache, in this snippet.

Veronica Scott said...

So sad. I can't wait till these two start really talking to each other, because I think you've got quite a backstory to share with us! Great excerpt!

Sarah Cass said...

So sad...to believe one thing and have everything ust turned on its head is so very tough. I wonder what secrets she's hiding.

Millie Burns said...

It'll be interesting to hear her response.

Charmaine Gordon said...

A hidden conversation going on and until it's out in the open they can't clear the way. Excellent eight.

Owllady said...

They're tiptoeing around that elephant in the room, but they're gonna have to admit it's there. Great excerpt.

Kate said...

Those two may need to be locked in a room until they can stop tap-dancing around the issues and work everything out.

How sad for them both.

Eleri Stone said...

Ah, there's a lot of pain there. Seems to be a lot more going on than what we see on the surface. Very nicely done:)

Teresa Cypher said...

Great emotions, Chelle. Seems to be setting up for a candid moment. Good 8. :-)

Karen Bynum said...

Very emotional 8. They have a lot to talk about. Enjoyed your snippet!