Saturday, January 11, 2014

After the lovemaking - a snippet from A Chaunce of Riches #WeWriWa #8Sunday 01/12/14

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Back to A Chaunce of Riches ~ As several of you mentioned in the comments last week, there will be regrets, but there is also more damage to be done. Ben has been holding on to his hurt and anger to try to protect himself from further hurt, but it is a battle he's losing. We're jumping ahead and Sam and Ben have finally given in and made love - it's far from a HEA... (as usual, creative punctuation and all that...)

“I love you Ben,” she whispered those words to him.
          He hung his head and couldn't bring himself to answer her; she was just as special as he always remembered.

          There was no real conversation between them as Ben drove Sam to her office, there was no acknowledgment of what had happened between them. Ben kept changing the topic whenever Sam tried to broach it. That evening, Dave came to her office to pick her up, he said Ben was at the house with Philip, Ben avoided her there, too.
          The next morning, Ben stayed at the school with Philip and left it to Dave to drive Sam to work, he hadn't allowed her any chance to talk with him and to ask how he felt. She was convinced that he had used her only to bury their history and to move on without her, that was what she had offered him. She was devastated.

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The day that Ben Johnson was hired as a bodyguard for some rich widow and her kid, he never expected to be working for the woman who had abandoned him just when he had needed her the most so many years before. Damn it all, he still wanted her. Samantha Chaunce never thought she would see him again. She never thought she would have to explain why she married the rich man over the man she had sworn she once loved. And she certainly never expected to find out that her rich husband had been murdered and fingers were pointing to her former lover. 

How far would you go for the person you loved?



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8 comments:

Linda said...

Ben is being so mean. I want to shake him.

Marcia said...

Ben seems kind of conflicted and it's messing up his chance at reuniting with her, yikes! Hope he figures out soon that he needs to hold on to her.

Charmaine Gordon said...

You've captured this reader leaving my imagination to create different scenarios. Good writing and a terrific eight.

Eleri Stone said...

Oh, Ben! Poor Sam:(

Veronica Scott said...

I feel sorry for both characters but hoping you'll give them a way to really connect...excellent excerpt, if sad.

Kate said...

Oh, that's so sad! Is his pride in the way or does he have an actual reason for keeping her at a distance?

Sue Ann Bowling said...

They certainly aren't comunicating very well.

Chelle Cordero said...

I love reading your comments. Yes, Ben is being awful hard on Sam but he was so deeply hurt and afraid of being as vulnerable again. I believe he was hoping to find she wasn't quite a special to him and to his dismay he realized how much he did want her. He can't understand how Sam could have been so cruel to him.