Saturday, February 15, 2014

Welcome to Bartlett's Rule & Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 02/16/14

Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior round. Every week writers post 8 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.

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Welcome to a snippet from Bartlett's Rule, my first novel published with Vanilla Heart Publishing. Even though this piece is already published, I find that receiving your comments is helpful as I write future stories - you strengthen me when I know how well (or not) I communicate with my readers, and I learn what readers like and don't care for. I really appreciate you for giving me your time.

Paige is working for a magazine's PR department - her supervisor is entrusting her with a special assignment...

         “Why can’t you just buy him dinner and tickets to a Broadway show for him and one of his many adoring hordes?”
“Excuse me?” Jeanmarie grinned mischievously.
“I said hordes,” Paige emphasized the “D” sound.
“Seriously, I’m sure that Lon Bartlett would prefer to choose his own company for the evening.”
“Paige that would be fine if we were just sending some executive a simple holiday remembrance, but we need to court this publication; and if we want the publisher happy, we make his star writer happy.” She looked down at her phone as if trying to hurry the young woman from her office, “This requires a more personal touch, take him out, wine and dine him. Do whatever you have to and make him happy.”
Slowly a frown settled on Paige’s face, “I hope you’re not suggesting...”


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Bartlett's Rule shares the story of Lon and Paige's love affair; a romance filled with hardship, emotion, danger and triumph. Falling in love was never the challenge; being there for each other, knowing just what to say and making it work is the real test. Paige and Lon are real; they are human, they cry and they laugh. Paige has to learn to trust. Lon has to learn to be patient.



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Bartlett’s Rule was named one of
Carolyn Howard-Johnson’s Top Ten Reads for 2009
on MyShelf.com

By Barbara Moroch
A fantastic read -- a love story between two seemingly very different kinds of people. Between all the tribulations that get in the way of their romance, they ultimately triumph. The story is so well crafted and the characters evoke lots of emotion from the reader. The plot takes lots of twists and turns and underscores the severity of rape crimes and the lasting damage it inflicts upon its victims...
 

10 comments:

Millie Burns said...

Hmm, interesting little start here...

Charmaine Gordon said...

Terrific beginning, Chelle. It's a grabber. I do like the way you mention that you learn from critique on published books. True as I also do.

Eleri Stone said...

"I said hordes." ROFL!!

Marcia said...

Uh oh, what exactly is it she's suggesting? I like the excerpt as is, in fact!

homecomingbook said...

Whores and hordes do sound alike. Could I make one suggestion? Lose the paragraph break in the middle of Paige's speech. It signals a change in speaker which confuses the reader.

Alexis Duran said...

Nice humor in this. I'm already looking forward to this dinner date.

Sarah W said...

“I said hordes,” Paige emphasized the “D” sound.

This is awesome, Chelle! :D

I'm hooked already!

Teresa Cypher said...

Nice!! lol, I love the emphasis on the D.

Surely not suggesting? Sounds as if her boss is...

Great 8, Chelle!

Veronica Scott said...

Ooh, I really enjoyed the tone of this and can't wait to read more. I want to meet the guy, I want to see all the complications that will ensue - I love it! Great snippet!

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Oh, he better not be suggesting what I think he is. Great snippet to draw us in!