Saturday, February 1, 2014

Will they ever mend their relationship? ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 02/01/14

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I had to skip ahead just a bit in the story because of some spoilers in the story - if you want to know what those are you'll just have to get a copy of A Chaunce of Riches.

The police were quite rough interrogating both Sam and Ben and introduced information that Sam never wanted Ben to know. He's p*ssed, but for reasons of his own he is staying to protect the rich widow and her son - tensions are incredibly high and they aren't exactly getting along. This snippet is after an unexplained accident in Sam's office, Ben is driving her home from the hospital. (creative punctuation has been used).

She was peeved when he got back to the car with the filled medicine bottles, “One can only hope you will take your bodyguard responsibilities strongly and test the drugs on yourself before I take them.”
He laughed, “Yeah, so I can fall asleep and leave you to your own devices?”
“You had no right to take control like you did, you really overstepped...”
His cell phone rang, “You want to put a hold on that tirade for now?”  He pulled the phone from his pocket and flipped it open before putting it to his ear, “Uh-huh... yeah... good, very good, all right, I’ll speak to you later.”
She couldn’t help her curiosity, “What was that about?”
He shook his head, “How do you know that wasn’t personal? Maybe that was my girlfriend.”
Sam glared at him, “Well please be sure to tell her that you took me to bed the other night.”

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The day that Ben Johnson was hired as a bodyguard for some rich widow and her kid, he never expected to be working for the woman who had abandoned him just when he had needed her the most so many years before. Damn it all, he still wanted her.
Samantha Chaunce never thought she would see him again. She never thought she would have to explain why she married the rich man over the man she had sworn she once loved. And she certainly never expected to find out that her rich husband had been murdered and fingers were pointing to her former lover. 

How far would you go for the person you loved?


Cara Bristol said...

Nice interchange between them.

Charmaine Gordon said...

Dynamite Dialogue. I do enjoy the give and take of your characters. They jump off the page and become real. Thanks, Chelle.

Marcia said...

Super tense. Am pretty curious about what set her off. Is she a little jealous there at the end!

Veronica Scott said...

O_o interesting indeed. I'm really enjoying this story and thoroughly engaged in wanting to know more. Great snippet!

Teresa Cypher said...

Outstanding retort! lol, love that last line. Great dialogue between these two, Chelle. The showers of sparks are very visual. ;-) Good 8!

Anonymous said...

I hope the phone range before he was actually on the road driving.

Millie Burns said...

Loved that last line. I'm guessing he doesn't have a girlfriend though.

Chelle Cordero said...

LOL Millie, the 2 of them are walking on eggshells around each other now and sniping out of frustration.

Pete Symes said...

Now that's one serious bodyguard. Laying low under the bed covers to thwart attackers. Call to duty.