Welcome to a snippet from Bartlett's Rule, my first novel published with Vanilla Heart Publishing. Even though this piece is already published, I find that receiving your comments is helpful as I write future stories - you strengthen me when I know how well (or not) I communicate with my readers, and I learn what readers like and don't care for. I really appreciate you for giving me your time.
Paige has gone out with Lon a few times and although she still is very reserved around him, she invites him back to her apartment and suggests that it's time to "be together". Lon is thrown off balance, he is used to being the one to initiate a seduction, but he can't deny he wants to be with her. He is careful to make sure this is what Paige really wants and they go to bed - that's when Paige panics... (yes, creative punctuation and so forth)
“Lon... stop.”
“What?” he raised his head to look at
her and was puzzled to see tears in her eyes, “what’s the matter, am I hurting
you?”; his fingers had stilled but he still held her beneath him.
Her breathing became more rapid, “get
off of me.”
He realized she wasn’t panting, she
was panicking, “what’s the matter Paige?”
“Get off of me,” she sounded
terrified.
Lon released her and rolled to his
side; Paige scampered off of the bed and slid down against the wall; her knees
were drawn to her chest to hide her nudity, she whimpered.
He snapped on the light and looked at
her, “what the hell just happened, Paige?”; it hurt to sit in his still aroused
state as he watched her curiously.
She mumbled something through her
tears; the only words he could make out were “I’m sorry.”
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Bartlett's Rule shares the story of Lon and Paige's love affair; a romance filled with hardship, emotion, danger and triumph. Falling in love was never the challenge; being there for each other, knowing just what to say and making it work is the real test. Paige and Lon are real; they are human, they cry and they laugh. Paige has to learn to trust. Lon has to learn to be patient.
Bartlett’s Rule was named one of
Carolyn Howard-Johnson’s
Top Ten Reads for 2009
on MyShelf.com
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8 comments:
What a shocker. You've got this reader hooked, Chelle. It's a what happens next to make a reader turn pages. Our goal as writers. And you've accomplished this in eight. Good job.
I'd keep reading to find out what was causing Paige to panic and what she would say to Lon. Lots of drama in this scene.
Oh poor girl. She's been hurt before...I hope he's compassionate.
Dramatic scene, makes me worried for her, so I'd definitely keep reading. Very effective excerpt!
I feel so bad for both of them...both seem very confused and hurt at the moment and at a time when they are at their most venerable. Wonderful, touching snippet!
Not the way it seemed it would go. Poor Paige...and poor Lon. Great emotion coming through the words, Chelle. :-)
Millie, you are really astute!
Thank you everyone for your valuable comments.
Sounds like she's trying to get over something in her past and finds she's not as ready as she thought.
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