Saturday, June 21, 2014

Adam is ready to talk - Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / June 22, 2014

Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior round. Every week writers post 8 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.

  
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Welcome to a snippet from Courage of the Heart. Courage of the Heart was originally published by Xlibris in 1999 (BEFORE they went full vanity press) - with no real marketing efforts from the publisher and before I knew much about the subject, it didn't do very well. However it was revised slightly and republished by Vanilla Heart Publishing in 2009 and has enjoyed a healthier reception.

Davie comes back from her father's to find Adam in the hospital with a serious case of pneumonia. When he is released, she stays with him to nurse him back to health.

This will be the final snippet from Courage of the Heart, next week I'll move on to another story. Your comments have helped me see different views of my writing and it's been really helpful. I used creative punctuation to make this fit:

"You said earlier that you wanted to talk."
"Yeah, Davie, this is really important…"
Davie knelt on the carpet next to the couch, "I'm here."
Adam twisted to face her, he realized he was having difficulty finding the right words to start, "It's about us, I want there to be an us, I don't know where this relationship will wind up, but suddenly I find myself thinking of tomorrow…with you. I never meant for that to happen."
"Why does that scare you?" Davie spoke softly.

"It scares me that you might not want to be a part of it," Adam swallowed and looked uncomfortably around the room; he realized that this could be the most important thing he ever had to say. His eyes finally settled on her, "Davie, there are some things I have to tell you about my past, some things that may make you walk out and never look back."

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Sometimes love is the only cure for the very deepest of emotional wounds. The story of the two lovers takes a series of unexpected and fast paced turns where lives, sanity and love are put in jeopardy. Their commitment to one another results in a spirit that binds them together and helps them to overcome physical and emotional dangers.

15 comments:

Debbie said...

I haven't been participating in WeWriWa for awhile, so don't know the story, but it sounds interesting. Hopefully, Davie can overcome whatever Adam did in the past. That's a great name for a female character. Unique!

Frank C. Etier said...

Yeah, cool name! (My wife's nickname is "Bob," so I can identify!)
If it's real love, I doubt much he can tell her will dissuade her.

"The heart has reasons that reason knows nothing of." -- Pascal

Sarah Cass said...

Lovely scene. I'm wondering what Adam has to reveal...but I hope Davie is able to accept it. Great 8

Botanist said...

Best to get those "some things" out in the open. It takes courage, the risk of losing everything, but better now than having secrets come out later.

Veronica Scott said...

I'm glad he's going to be brave enough to tell her whatever it is right up front. Hopefully she can handle the revelation! Interesting snippet...

Charmaine Gordon said...

Courageous beautifully written scene, Chelle.Get it out in the open and let the chips fall where they lie, I always say.Don't listen to me.

Victoria Davenport said...

Some serious emotions here. It makes me sad this is the last snippet, because I want to know what he has to say next :) Great 8!

Chelle Cordero said...

Hi all,
The name Davie is short for Davida; I heard that name as a child and fell in love with it.
HEA, so she does accept and stay with him, but his past comes back to create more than a little havoc and they have much greater obstacles to overcome.
Thank you so much for your comments, I have seen things in my writing & story that I was never aware of - that's why I stayed with this story so long in WeWriWa.

Dani Jace said...

And the conflict begins... will she stay or will she go! Great snippet.

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

I wonder what's in his past and if she'll be able to handle it. Intriguing snippet.

homecomingbook said...

Has me wondering what he's been hiding.

Millie Burns said...

Hmm, what's he been hiding?

Jenna said...

That does take courage. I hope she understands and forgives whatever it was he did. Compelling 8!

caitlinsternwrites said...

If my name was Davida, I'd go by Davie, too.

I like how he looks around the room for the courage to say what comes next. Good on him for saying it, even if he's scared of what will happen. Sometimes honesty doesn't pay off, but lies make things so much worse!

Teresa Cypher said...

Oh, what a cliffhanger, Chelle! I hope you pick up here this week. :-) This snippet is very well written. Quite visual. Nicely done. :-)