Saturday, January 3, 2015

Loretta disapproves - Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 01/04/15

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I'm introducing snippets from More Than a Friend, a part of The Many Faces of Chelle Cordero, a short-story collection which exemplifies (I hope) the diversity of my writing.

More Than a Friend is a short story based on a manuscript of the same name (which has never been published) This manuscript was co-authored by my sister, Barbara Cordero Du-Bois, and me. I re-wrote it as a short story because I wanted my characters to LIVE.

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I’m skipping ahead since last week’s snippet. Janice has returned to work. We found out that she met her husband through Jerry and that he was upset he never made it clear how he felt about her. They’ve spent time together as friends. Janis was summoned to her mother-in-law’s (Loretta, Jerry’s aunt) for dinner and we learn that Loretta has never liked Jerry. Janice’s sister-in-law, Mandy, is also present for dinner. And now the 8 sentences:

Dinner was strained. If it hadn’t been for Mandy’s effervescence it probably would have been silent except for Loretta’s crying spells. Janis really did feel for Loretta and never faulted her emotions, but her anger over Janis’ return to work and her continued friendship with Jerry was inexcusable.
“You are a widow and you should act like one. You shouldn’t be so self-centered, everything doesn’t revolve around you.”
“Mom,” even Mandy was taken aback by Loretta’s hostility, “Billy would never have wanted Janis to stop living.”
“How do you know what Billy would have wanted? He’s… he’s dead.” 


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More Than a Friend
Can best friends become lovers
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7 comments:

Patricia Preston said...

Loretta sounds like she has a grudge against Janice. Lots of family drama!

Author, Neva Rodriguez said...

Great eight! Gosh, I felt like someone slapped me with that widow statement. You can feel the deep emotions that are going around this room.

Charmaine Gordon said...

I ache for the widow and family conflict is over the top as she pulls her life back together. Good eight.

Elaine Cantrell said...

That's quite a dinner! Nicely done.

Veronica Scott said...

Ah yes, as a widow, I've had to deal with other people' expectations. I hope your character will be strong within herself and do what *she* needs to do. Excellent, true to life excerpt.

caitlinsternwrites said...

You're a widow doesn't mean you're dead, for heaven's sake! I would hope any loved one would want you to live after their loss, and be happy. And if they wouldn't... they were kind of a terrible person, then, and their opinion shouldn't matter.

Frank C. Etier said...

Nice 8!
I would rather hear the first paragraph from the characters via dialog rather than from the narrator.
And, you write such good dialog, too!