Saturday, January 31, 2015

Betrayal - Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 02/01/15

Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior round. Every week writers post 8 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.

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I'm introducing snippets from More Than a Friend, a part of The Many Faces of Chelle Cordero, a short-story collection which exemplifies (I hope) the diversity of my writing.

More Than a Friend is a short story based on a manuscript of the same name (which has never been published) This manuscript was co-authored by my sister, Barbara Cordero Du-Bois, and me. I re-wrote it as a short story because I wanted my characters to LIVE.

Jerry knew something was wrong when he heard how upset Janis sounded and he came over right away. I hadn't planned to continue with this story this week, but several of you said you were curious about what would happen, so ...the 8 sentences:

She told him about Loretta’s tirade and how it led to the conversation with Mandy; she asked him if it was true, did he love her?
It took a moment for Jerry to overcome his embarrassment, “Janice, I loved you since the day I first met you, the first day we spent in the squad car together.”
“Why didn’t you ever say anything?”
“You were new to the force and I knew you felt like you had to prove yourself.” He paused, “Would it have made a difference?”
“Billy said that you had a girlfriend and that was why you asked him to take me home after Mandy and Brian’s wedding.”
“He told me that you wanted to leave early and had asked him to drive you.”
Billy had betrayed both of them.



Yes, it may look like Janis and Jerry are going to get together, but there are a lot more obstacles they are going to have to overcome. I hope you've enjoyed this little preview.
Next week I am moving on to another story.


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More Than a Friend
Can best friends become lovers
and share a lifetime together?

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The Many Faces of Chelle Cordero is a single author collection of short stories featuring Introduction, Pussycat Tails, Holiday Happiness, Not Alone, I Swear That Raccoon Just Knocked on the Door, Stormy Weather, A Mother’s Love, More Than a Friend, The Meeting, The Vacation and a special bonus section.


It's Super Bowl XLIX

While avid sports fans will be watching the game today, there are those who are in it just for the snackage and drinks, and even more who will be glued to TV sets all over just for the commercials - "A 30-second advertisement during this year's game costs a cool $4.5 million. That's an average of $150,000 per second." Oh my!

This year running right alongside well-trained horses and lost puppies, attractively scented men, cell-phones, and frugal hotel accommodations,  will be a very important PSA (public service announcement) that will hopefully get people thinking and talking. 

brought to you by NoMore.org you can read
more about the message
here
I've written about relationships and sometimes my stories talk about abusive
relationships, but this video about a real life 911 call truly chills me.
It's a subject we need to talk about - get involved.
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Meanwhile, this is a shoutout to the brave (& probably slightly off-their-rockers!) folks who will be running into the ice-cold and frigid waters of the Hudson River in Stony Point NY today to help raise funds for local children with high medical bills; in 2013 they raised funds to help families devastated by SuperStorm Sandy. This yearly event hosts hundreds of "swimmers" and thousands of watchers and has raised  thousands of dollars for its beneficiaries. If you'd like to help a worthy cause please click HERE
my daughter participates every year (oy!); in this video from
 2013 she is one of the two gals wearing Viking helmets!



21 comments:

Jennifer Reynolds said...

I hope everything works our for them in the end.

P.T.Wyant said...

Sounds like Billy wanted her all to himself -- but did want her or just not want Jerry to have her?

Gem Sivad said...

Even if all is fair in love and war, I don't like Billy's manipulations. I doubt if his "friends" will either.

Teresa Cypher said...

As the saying goes, who needs enemies when you have friends like that? What a scoundrel.

Good 8! :-)

Teresa Cypher said...
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Teresa Cypher said...

I somehow left the same comment twice, Chelle, so I deleted one. :-)

Sarah W said...

Oh, those "no fault" missed opportunities!

I hope they manage all those obstacles . . . I like this story, Chelle. :)

JTsuruoka said...

It's the obstacles that make for a great story. Nice snippet!

Frank Fisher said...

Oh, I can see more obstacles coming. It seems Billy is messing with them! Great snippet!

Michelle Howard said...

Billy has wasted so much time for them

Charmaine Gordon said...

They've shared what has kept them apart. His name is Billy. This reads like daytime drama, "Will the couple get together now that the secrets are revealed? And will Billy continue to keep them apart? Tune in next week." Except this story is also like real life and that's why it's so good.

Veronica Scott said...

Very interesting insight you gave us today, into why the events have happened the way they did. Excellent excerpt1

Siobhan Muir said...

This is why you always ask the source. Great snippet, Chelle. :)

tinachristopherauthor.com said...

Oh my, that is hard to get over. All that time wasted...Another intense snippet. Great 8.

Cara Bristol said...

Billy sure messed things up for them. But it sounds like they're on track.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Billy isn't the friend he seems to be. Nice revelation.

caitlinsternwrites said...

Ugh. Billy sounds like one of those smooth talkers who doesn't care who he hurts. It's sad what they can do to trusting people.

cdescoteauxwrites.com said...

Oh, boo. Billy needs a comeuppance for that!

Chelle Cordero said...

Thanks for all of your comments - yes Billy had ulterior motives and he was totally deceptive to people who trusted him. In the first snippet of this story Janis had just buried Billy (he was killed in the line of duty) but even though he may not be there anymore, the damage he did will have repercussions. But I have already gone beyond the 40% that I am allowed to share...
(btw, I am thrilled that everyone is seeing Billy for the *** that he really was)

Linda said...

Hum, I think Billy was just taking his chance and managed to win at the game.

Author, Neva Rodriguez said...

Oh that Billy!!! Everything happens for a reason though and it sounds like their time has come! :) Forget Billy, what's next???? Great eight!!!