Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior round. Every week writers post 8 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.
My apologies, this past week of Passover has been so busy that I haven't spent much time online - so I missed reading all of your snippets last weekend. The holiday ends this weekend and I have to pack all of my Pesach dishes away, but I will try my best to double up and read snippets during the week.
Despite Ryan's promise to get Deanna home, F.B.I. agents raid the compound and Ryan and one of the other bank robbers are missing. As the agents prepare to bring Deanna to safety, the other missing bank robber appears.
...and now the eight (creative editing used to make it fit):
The man
had a rifle pointed at Deanna — a shot rang out and he went
down. Ryan shot him. One of the F.B.I. agents ordered Ryan to drop his weapon;
he didn’t.
Another
shot rang out, Deanna watched in horror as Ryan’s body jerked and he
collapsed.
“Ryan,” Deanna tried to run to him, she was stopped by one of the other agents, “Ryan, please...”
She
could see blood staining the chest of the man Ryan shot.
The
agent who shot Ryan went to check his pulse and then repeated the gesture on
the other man, “they’re both dead.”
“No, no, no...” Deanna collapsed crying Ryan’s name.
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Hostage Heart by Chelle Cordero is available as an AUDIOBOOK and in All Ebook Formats and Print Editions.
Life was hard after the hurricanes swept through, destroying her parents' home and livelihood...Deanna did the only thing she could do. She moved to New York City, found a job, worked hard, scrimped and saved to send what little she could manage back home to Louisiana to her parents.
An errand for her boss - a chance encounter with a crew of bank robbers - a kind man who tried to help her and deserved her courageous help in return... But he wasn't the man she thought he was...no, he was so very much more!
Review
Hostage Heart is a captivating read… I really enjoyed Chelle Cordero's 'Hostage Heart. It read quickly and kept my interest until the very end. I would highly recommend this book and I plan to read all of the author's other books. It took me along on the adventure. I enjoyed the romance.
~LDB, on Amazon
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Sometimes it seems that there just isn't enough time
in the week to get everything done and
this past week was a perfect example of that.
in the week to get everything done and
this past week was a perfect example of that.
We have to prioritize the things we do and sometimes have to
give up some activities... It isn't that the things we don't get to
aren't important, we just can't do it all.
give up some activities... It isn't that the things we don't get to
aren't important, we just can't do it all.
My time was spent with family and I concentrated on home life.
In a way it's been kind of a renewal and with the weather finally
showing up with some warmer days, I look forward to a fresher
perspective and greater productivity.
In a way it's been kind of a renewal and with the weather finally
showing up with some warmer days, I look forward to a fresher
perspective and greater productivity.
I think spring is finally here.
20 comments:
No No No ... that's not how it's supposed to be!!!!!!!
Sad, but good snippet :-(
Wow okay. That was unexpected. Powerful snippet.
He's undercover. Maybe Ryan's not "real dead". Hoping for them.
I'm with Gem! Here's hoping the FBI were just protecting Ryan's cover . . .
This has got to be a dream scene. Right? It cannot be the end here.
Maybe he's pretend dead? Oh what the heck. Second guessing will do no good. I'll tune in next week.
A snippet full of drama and emotion. Love it
Oh, man, what a heartbreaking snippet. Nicely done, Chelle. :)
Oh no!
But hey somehow it had to finish like that at some point. They were playing a dangerous game.
Wow I was not prepared for that! Intense snippet.
That was a shock! I totally was not expecting that...
Hi Chelle! I hope you had a wonderful and blessed Passover. I love your eight! Poor Ryan and Deanna :-(
Noooooooo! Dagnabit! I was so sure he was undercover. This isn't the end, right? I want to read this, but don't think I will if this is the end... :-)
Oh my! I wonder if the agent who shot Ryan is in on it. You only mentioned blood on the other man's chest...The plot thickens:).
I'm with everyone else, hoping Ryan isn't really dead here. Kinda hard to have the Happily Ever After if he is. Very dramatic scene!!!
Tough stuff, nicely handled. The pace is good, which is all-important.
Great work. Again I totally feel like this fits in perfectly with what's going on at my job. Warm weather has been bringing out more shots fired calls, so as she's talking to him, it reminds me of several of the callers I've talked to. So intense and unbelievably descriptive. Love the eight.
LOL, some of you are so wonderfully astute. Tune in next week for some answers... Thank you all.
Ditto Gem, he's undercover and this was the way of getting him out. Right?? Right Chelle? LOL
Oh, this is too sad! I'm with everyone else, this can't be real...
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