Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior round. Every week writers post 8 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.
This scene takes place about half a chapter later in the book after Deanna saw Ryan shot. She's mourned him and tried to get on with her life and all of the changes the incident has caused. Three months have passed since Ryan was declared dead and Agent Connie Reed tried to interview Deanna in the hospital. (by the way Deanna has given testimony against the surviving bank robbers).
...and now the eight:
Connie
was seated at her desk hunched over a mound of paperwork when he entered the
room; he stood quietly and waited for her to say something.
Finally she broke the
uncomfortable silence, “You’re back.”
“Much to your dismay, I’m sure.”
“Yes, I don’t know why you didn’t take my advice and
request a transfer Agent Hunter.”
“After
three months in the middle of nowhere strapped to a desk there is no way I
would want to be stuck in that hellhole, I’m a field agent...”
“You’re a field agent who overstepped your bounds, you are damn lucky she didn’t file charges against you or you would be out of a job and in jail too.”
He did a lot of thinking
about Deanna the past three months, he hadn’t had much else to occupy
his mind, “How is she?”
“She thinks you’re dead, leave it that way.”
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Hostage Heart by Chelle Cordero is available as an AUDIOBOOK and in All Ebook Formats and Print Editions.
Life was hard after the hurricanes swept through, destroying her parents' home and livelihood...Deanna did the only thing she could do. She moved to New York City, found a job, worked hard, scrimped and saved to send what little she could manage back home to Louisiana to her parents.
An errand for her boss - a chance encounter with a crew of bank robbers - a kind man who tried to help her and deserved her courageous help in return... But he wasn't the man she thought he was...no, he was so very much more!
Review
Hostage Heart is a captivating read… I really enjoyed Chelle Cordero's 'Hostage Heart. It read quickly and kept my interest until the very end. I would highly recommend this book and I plan to read all of the author's other books. It took me along on the adventure. I enjoyed the romance.
~LDB, on Amazon
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Hostage Heart was my sixth novel published with Vanilla Heart Publishing (summer 2009) - inspired by stories from my husband who was part of a Federal medical team after Hurricanes Katrina and Rita, and memories of an ex-boyfriend who worked undercover in law enforcement, Hostage Heart was billed as "a hot romantic suspense about deception".
I've posted eight-sentence snippets from Hostage Heart since February and have now pushed the limits of my contract regarding how many words I can post (...ssh), so next week I will be moving on to another story. In the meanwhile if you've missed any of my weekly Hostage Heart postings, just click on the links below (the earliest is the top) to read any of them leading up to this week's (above).
19 comments:
Oh, what a hook in that last line! Nicely done, Chelle!
Oh my god, what a twist! I never saw this one coming!
Yes baby, he's back. I was hoping for something like that ... and yes ignore her and go and see Deanna! Go go go !
Yes, I'm sure he'll do exactly that. :)
I can't wait to see Deanna's reaction!
Huh, she thinks he's dead, leave it that way? Way to real me in Chelle! Great eight! Love it!
I knew it! Hahaha, guess he's got a lot of making up to do and outside the view of his boss. Great snippet, Chelle. :)
Yeah, somehow I think this cease-fire won't last. Deanna's going to see him or something.
Oh we all know he's not going to leave it that way. lol Great scene! Love the last line to hook us.
What a line that last one was. Great snippet. Still pulling me in.
I'm dangling on the last line, hooked like an old fish. Perfect, Chelle. Way to go.
Awesome last line! Way to hook readers!
Yay, he's baack! I'm so happy, and surely he won't take that advice to leave Deanna alone! This story is an excellent roller coaster ride :-)
So Ryan's not really dead? Cool!
Ryan seems like soap opera character Roger Thorpe and James Stenbeck, coming back after a presumed death. I don't think he's going to let sleeping dogs lie, if he's so preoccupied with thoughts of her.
I bought the book. I'll get to it as quickly as I can.
Wow... this goes from tense to downright heavy in no time. Solid dialogue, and well-paced too.
Oh my, talk about trouble. The tension leaps off the page and I'm curious to see how the story continues. Great 8.
No, you can't stop there! So many questions!
Great snippet, Chelle! :)
lol, sorry, my contract limits me as to how much I can release in blogs and all. The e-book is just $3.99. Or if you are willing to review it, you can join the VHP Reader-Review club, get details here: https://www.vanillaheartpublishing.com/reader-reviewer-club-1.html
So glad it intrigued you.
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