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Still in shock after seeing Ryan shot, Deanna is taken to the hospital after her ordeal and examined. FBI Agent Connie Reed comes in to take her statement. Deanna is getting over her shock and is getting angry. (I chopped this piece up because I wanted to get it all in)
...and now the eight (creative editing used to make it fit):
“Miss Blair, the nurse
told us there was, uhm, evidence of sexual contact, do you want to press
charges?”
Deanna shook her head, “I
wanted to be with him, I wanted to be with Ryan, the man your agents shot. Why
did you have to kill him?”
"You were with... Ryan? He, he pulled a gun, he
must have known he would be shot once he pulled the gun.” Reed sighed, “Miss
Blair, I understand you’ve been through an awful lot, I’ll leave my card at the
nurse’s desk, please call me when you are ready to talk.”
Closing the door behind her, Reed walked down the length
of the corridor before pulling her cell phone out of her pocket to punch in
numbers. She put the flip-phone to her ear. “The girl is okay, we have some
serious problems though, we need to talk.”
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Hostage Heart by Chelle Cordero is available as an AUDIOBOOK and in All Ebook Formats and Print Editions.
Life was hard after the hurricanes swept through, destroying her parents' home and livelihood...Deanna did the only thing she could do. She moved to New York City, found a job, worked hard, scrimped and saved to send what little she could manage back home to Louisiana to her parents.
An errand for her boss - a chance encounter with a crew of bank robbers - a kind man who tried to help her and deserved her courageous help in return... But he wasn't the man she thought he was...no, he was so very much more!
Review
Hostage Heart is a captivating read… I really enjoyed Chelle Cordero's 'Hostage Heart. It read quickly and kept my interest until the very end. I would highly recommend this book and I plan to read all of the author's other books. It took me along on the adventure. I enjoyed the romance.
~LDB, on Amazon
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20 comments:
I can't wait to find out what the problem is. :)
Serious problems all right ... can't wait for the next 8 ... great stuff!
You've done a great job of ramping up the intrigue. I definitely want to read more. Nicely done!
I want to know more. Serious problem... yep, I'd say so.
Way to throw the guy off balance!
Fantastic situation, Chelle--and very well twisted!
Uh oh!!! Anytime human emotions are involved, some suit has to talk :-) Great and engaging eight!!!!
Uh oh!!! Anytime human emotions are involved, some suit has to talk :-) Great and engaging eight!!!!
I like this. I'm thinking that he's not dead -- that they faked it to get him out of his undercover role.
Well, I'm hooked! There's obviously much more to this mystery and I can't wait to find out! :)
WOW! Great job of writing this wonderful intriguing story, Chelle.
These snippets have become more intense. Hooked.
Oh-ho, there's more going on here than meets the eye. Great snippet, Chelle. :)
Wow, great cliffhanger in this snippet! Now I want to read more..
Oh, wow. If that's the edited version, I can't wait for the full version. Quick question though, why would an FBI agent stammer when interviewing a witness? I'm guessing her reasoning comes in a later snippet... Great 8, really drew me in!
Great snippet! Certainly makes me want to read more.
You've got me wondering what's going on here. Great eight.
Okay, I give up. I'll be heading on over to Amazon to buy it even though my TBR stack is enormous.
I'm SO riveted by this story and on pins and needles hoping Ryan didn't really get shot. (Or if he did that he survives...) Excellent excerpt, loved the deepening of the mystery.
need to talk are never good words. Who's on the other end of the call is what I need to know. Ryan?
Lots of excitement going on here, with a touch of sinister. I love the snippet and want to read more
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