Saturday, July 4, 2015

Lunch is ready ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 07/05/15

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My entry this week is from Common Bond, Tangled Hearts. Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son. 

Following right after last week's snippet, Justin joins Lane in her apartment for the proffered soup. Aware that Justin comes from money makes Layne nervous about his approval.

  (the following has been edited to fit)  ...and now the eight nine:

Years ago, Layne had learned to stretch a dollar by making leftover meat and vegetables into stew and then into a watered down soup; she did her best to provide the best she could for her young son. She felt guilty for denying him a father, she didn't want to have to deny him anything else either. Layne arranged everything on a tray and carried it to the small folding table she had set for the two of them in the living room.

Justin was in the living room, he offered to help but when she told him it was no bother, he used the time to look at the modest furnishings. The clay pot on the coffee table looked like Dennis might have made it in school and his mother proudly displayed it for all to see just as if it were some expensive Ming-Dynasty vase. It obviously hadn't been easy for them financially.

Layne was worried that he would judge their meager set-up harshly, she worried that he would want to take Dennis away from her; he could afford to give their son so many luxuries.

"Lunch is served, I'm sorry, I'm sure you're used to much better."

"It smells great, thanks for inviting me..."

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About Common Bond, Tangled Hearts

Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son.
Justin, the victim of a fraternity prank, and Layne, the subject of a forced insemination, have produced a beautiful child that they are both willing to protect… at all costs.
The two parents realize they can love each other, but when Layne’s abusive “ex-husband” shows up, they are torn apart by danger, kidnapping and lies. Justin won’t give up until Layne is returned to him. Layne uses her newfound strength, courage and knowledge to defy Charlie’s ugliest demands.


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Kim M said...

Nicely done Chelle. The tension and unspoken thoughts promise to make things interesting.

Charmaine Gordon said...

You have a written a perfect description of her life to this time. Well done, Chelle and now more to come.

Sarah W said...

Her concerns are realistic--luckily, we know he's okay! :)

(his family, though . . . )

Anonymous said...

Realistic and filled with tension! Great job!

Veronica Scott said...

And hopefully they can bond a bit more over lunch. I really liked all the details you included in this excerpt!

Ed Hoornaert said...

This guy's rich, if I remember correctly, so he probably won't merely accept poverty without either disapproval or a desire to fix things.

Teresa Cypher said...

I think they're coming together. They both want the same thing, really. What's best for Dennis. This snippet is pretty clear on that. I understand her fears, though. I really do.

Good snippet, Chelle!

Unknown said...

I feel for both of them- what a tough situation. Great snippet!

Unknown said...

Ooh, that one gave me the chills. He better not be judging, it sounds like she's done well for herself. Very realistic, I love it. Sorry for the late comment. I'm just making my rounds now. I had my first homicide call over the weekend and it really shook me up. Ugh. :( Well now that it's over and done with, I'll be better prepared in the future.