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Layne assured her friend Rita that she didn't kidnap her own son and asked Rita to let Dennis spend the night at her house. She wished Justin was there, but she knew she had to handle things on her own, at least for now Dennis would be safe. Layne's alone in the apartment and nervous. Justin comes back to town earlier than expected and knocks on Layne's door.
(the following has been edited to fit) ...and now the
There was a knock at the door
and Layne was sure she didn't want to open it.
Justin's muffled voice came
through the door, "Layne?"
"Justin," Layne
threw open the door and flung herself into his arms, "you're back
early."
"If I had realized this
was the kind of greeting I would get, I would have done my best to get back
even sooner." He looked towards the bedroom door, "uh, where's
Dennis?"
"He's staying at a
friend's place tonight, I'm sorry, I didn't expect you back until
tomorrow."
"When will he be back?"
"Tomorrow morning, before
school."
Justin smiled, "if I
promise to be out of here before he arrives, can I spend the night with
you?"
"I was hoping you might,"
Layne decided to enjoy the night; she'd tell him about her strange visit
tomorrow.
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About Common Bond, Tangled Hearts
Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son.
Justin, the victim of a fraternity prank, and Layne, the subject of a forced insemination, have produced a beautiful child that they are both willing to protect… at all costs.
The two parents realize they can love each other, but when Layne’s abusive “ex-husband” shows up, they are torn apart by danger, kidnapping and lies. Justin won’t give up until Layne is returned to him. Layne uses her newfound strength, courage and knowledge to defy Charlie’s ugliest demands.
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Jewish holiday of Rosh Hashanah (starts Sunday at sundown).
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“A good inscription and sealing [in the Book of Life].
From our home to yours, I wish ALL of you
a wondrous year ahead filled with happiness and joys abundant.
May you always be blessed with health and prosperity.
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a wondrous year ahead filled with happiness and joys abundant.
May you always be blessed with health and prosperity.
(& lots of book sales!)
by the way, Mon, 14 September 2015 = 1st of Tishrei, 5776
17 comments:
Since she's fearful about her husband's return, I imagine she's glad Justin will be there overnight.
I'm feeling like this story could become either sexy or very, very tense soon...great job!
I hope she'll enjoy the night with him first, before she opens up about the happenings the previous day.
Well, they're finally both going in the same direction at the same time. But I see bad things ahead. I wonder how safe Dennis is where he's at.
L'shanah tovah to you and yours. :-)I hope you enjoy your celebration, Chelle.
Happy New Year, Chelle.
Some uninterrupted grown-up-time sounds like an excellent idea!
I can feel her angst and uncertainty, for now Justin can help her relax.
A bit of romance before the main event always helps. This snippet stirs the blood for what lies ahead.
Happy holidays to you and yours, dear friend.
I'm glad he's there, and think these two deserve a little time alone. :)
Loved the snippet - these two have progressed so far since he story began for them! I have a feeling things might get ugly with that exhusband though - really enjoying the story. Great ecxerpt!
Uh oh. I think she should have told him tonight.
Isn't that like burning the candle on each end?
This is a strong piece-- really sets the table for what's coming. It feels very live and very real.
I love the flirty way he asks if he can stay.
Ooh, bold move Justin. Hmm, anxiously waiting for her response. Love it!
This might be an interesting night. :)
I think she better tell him about the strange visit now. I'm sure they should be expecting company.
Ah, perfect timing on his part to ease her worry. I get the feeling she should enjoy the night while she can, because once Justin finds out about the visitor, I get the feeling he's going to get angry as all hell and over protective. Nice snippet.
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