Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior round. Every week writers post 8 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.
Happy to see each other and taking advantage of being alone, they make love and then get comfortable in each other's arms. But Layne can't stop worrying and she's not used to asking for help.
(the following has been edited to fit) ...and now the
She
was resting her head on his shoulder, "Justin, I need to ask a
favor."
"Whatever
you want," he kissed the top of her head.
"I
don't have the money for a lawyer, I need to have papers drawn up so if
anything happens to me, you have custody of Dennis. I know that you are
biologically his father, but I don't know how that would hold up in a court and
I just don't want him being made a ward of the state or worse, having Charlie get a
hold of him."
"Is
there a problem?"
She hesitated, but had to make sure that her son was protected, "could you hire a lawyer to
have those papers done up? I wouldn't ask, but I can't afford it and..."
"Ssh,
of course, don't worry. I'll call my lawyer tomorrow morning and get things
started."
"Thank
you," she felt better knowing that Justin was there.
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About Common Bond, Tangled Hearts
Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son.
Justin, the victim of a fraternity prank, and Layne, the subject of a forced insemination, have produced a beautiful child that they are both willing to protect… at all costs.
The two parents realize they can love each other, but when Layne’s abusive “ex-husband” shows up, they are torn apart by danger, kidnapping and lies. Justin won’t give up until Layne is returned to him. Layne uses her newfound strength, courage and knowledge to defy Charlie’s ugliest demands.
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The period between Rosh Hashanah (this past Sunday night through Tuesday sundown) and Yom Kippur (next Tuesday night through Wednesday sundown), more commonly known as the Jewish New Year observance, is a time for personal reflection and introspection. We learn to evaluate all that we've done in the past year and ask for forgiveness for wrongs and hurts we've inflicted, whether intentional or not; and of course we must try to do better in the coming year so that our apologies are truly more than mere lip service. More importantly we need to forgive others; sometimes forgiveness is not so easy, or maybe our memories are just too keen.
With some of the dastardly deeds "bad guys" have done to my heroes and heroines in my books, I often wonder how much can really be forgiven. Although I know as a writer that no real person is all good or all bad, I sometimes marvel at the resilience of some of my characters and the inherent need to be kind. Am I holding my characters to higher standard than I live my own life? Maybe it's just wishful thinking on my part that I might one day be that able to, as a very dear friend always says, just keep putting one foot in front of another no matter what the odds. I think I personally struggle against the sting left by past hurts and yet the characters I create make it look so easy to move on.
19 comments:
Good for her! If ever there was a good time to get help - this was it!
I like how you attend to the practical details, rather than dealing in fairy tale romance.
I have to wonder if "tomorrow" is going to be "soon enough."
Hmmm...isn't his lawyer the one who didn't want him to get involved in the first place?? Wow...all kinds of bad things could happen... Good 8, Chelle. :-)
So he is the child's father! Yes, I like this Chelle, the way she's more concerned about her child than basking in the afterglow.
I also liked how you shared what Rosh Hoshana and Yom Kippur mean to you. Reflection and forgiveness are important tasks for all of us, and who knows, maybe our characters are the best parts of our very souls. Thanks for sharing.
I would think that being his biological father would be enough, but better to be safe than sorry.
At least the topic of conversation went smoothly. Good flow of writing!
How perfect can you get? Just wonderful and you leave ua wondering about the lawyer. Will he be fast enough?
I hope nothing happens, but so good that she's thinking of her son and his safety. I'm glad he's going to help out.
I like Justin and I'm glad she's trying to get all the practical legal matters covered just in case. Excellent excerpt!
Justin is a great guy. I love his attitude, very calm and willing. Love the scene, Great work!
I'm liking Justin! I think he can protect their son from her ex.
I can relate to her fear in asking--good for her for doing so!
Can't wait for next weeks snippet. Loving Justin.
She's finally trusting him a little. I hope it's not too late!
I like that she's looking out for her son and he's more than willing to help her. Sounds like good father material!
Good stuff. Her worry and even a little bit of desperation are all there and come through in both the prose and dialogue. The sense of relief at the end is palpable.
Things ar totally going to get worth. That's so scary!
And he doesn't even push to ask her what is wrong. Hmm... He either trusts she will tell him in time why, or he already has a feeling he might know. I would have expected more questions from him. Except, I get the feeling trouble is ahead before those documents are completed, and I get the feeling that by saying that, she might be fearing for her life... Great snippet though!
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