Saturday, December 26, 2015

Keeping her distance ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 12/27/15

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I'm sharing snippets from Stormy Weather, one of the short stories in The Many Faces of Chelle Cordero collection. 

Last week the handsome stranger lets Debbie know that the hurricane is only a Category 2, he doesn't seem concerned. Debbie, on the other hand is a bit worried. Meanwhile it's obvious the stranger likes what he sees...

Creative editing alert!  Here are ten more lines... 


           She looked back as she bent over and was annoyed to catch his leer, “are you enjoying the show?” She sounded cynical.
Patches of red tinged his cheeks, his embarrassment surprised her. “Sorry,” he looked back at the water, “I’m Bruce.”
She nodded in acknowledgment but didn’t bother to return the courtesy, “so how long before this hurricane actually hits?” Turning towards the hotel, she wrapped a clean towel around her waist.
“We’ve got about twelve or fourteen hours.” Bruce fell into step next to her, “where are you from?”
“Philadelphia.”
He hoped she’d be a little more forthcoming; she wasn’t.
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The Many Faces of Chelle Cordero is a single author collection of short stories featuring Introduction, Pussycat Tails, Holiday Happiness, Not Alone, I Swear That Raccoon Just Knocked on the Door, Stormy Weather, A Mother’s Love, More Than a Friend, The Meeting, The Vacation and a special bonus section.

Stormy Weather
The ominous skies and howling winds of a hurricane lead to an unexpected and warmhearted friendship.


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2015 Christmas Short Story CVR

a Holiday Short Story
by Chelle Cordero

Dini didn’t want to think about her past. And, Seth wasn’t thinking about anything but his past. Thrown together as Santa and his Number One Elf at the homeless shelter, Dini and Seth seem to be on opposite sides… of everything. Her past is catching up to her, and Seth may risk his future to protect her.

11 comments:

Kim Magennis said...

Snappy dialogue Chelle. I am looking foward to getting in to this story.

The Belle in Blue said...

I like the way the threatening weather kind of mirrors their interactions. Tension in the air for sure! ;-)

Charmaine Gordon said...

She's not playing his game; not with a hurricane coming. Wow!Not with a hurricane ahead. good story.

Ed Hoornaert said...

This snippet makes good use of weather as both a story character and an expression of emotions.

Veronica Scott said...

These two sure aren't getting off to thee best start with each other but I'm sure the hurricane will provide more opportunity for them to chat. Well, when they can be heard over the wind! Great snippet...

Elaine Cantrell said...

I was surprised he blessed. Maybe there's something more there than shows on the surface.

Caitlin Stern said...

Poor Bruce. He's going to have to earn her forgiveness--maybe he can do something helpful for her.

Iris Blobel said...

After his tourist comment i'm not surprised she's not more forthcoming.

dmorgana said...

Haha, if I was her, I wouldn't be very forthcoming either after that stare. I like her already.

diannehartsock said...

Maybe it would help if he was a little less obvious! Great snippet.

Linda said...

Well generally when someone take holidays alone, it's because they want to be alone, not really to be forthcoming.