Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday round. Every week writers post 8-to-10 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.
A long, long time ago I shared a few snippets from my Paranormal Romantic Suspense, Karma Visited (only 5) - and we didn't get a full taste of this story. Since I am working on a sequel and revisiting the story for myself, I'm sharing more with you and soaking up your comments.
Do you believe in karma? Annie Furman has a gift that allows her, while she sleeps, to visit people in their time of need - but who will be there for her when she needs help? Undersheriff Dave Turner is investigating a series of home invasions and homicides. He has no idea that solving this case will lead him to the woman of his dreams.
We've skipped ahead a bit, past another argument Annie has with Scott and past a telephone argument Dave has with his ex-wife over alimony. In the next snippet or two you will learn how significant this case is to the story line between Dave and Annie. (Reminder, Tim is Dave's partner at work)
Creative editing alert! Here are eight lines...
Tim came into the squad room, he seemed anxious, “we’ve got a
missing girl, her car was found abandoned a few miles southwest of here. She’s
changing jobs and traveling through.”
“Why do we think she’s headed this way?”
“She left a copy of the route back at her old place, the
roommate found it when she got a call from the new employer, the kid never made
it to a meeting.”
They made a cursory inspection of the car and its contents;
her clothing was still in a suitcase in the trunk along with a box of books and
framed pictures.
The roommate found a fax machine and sent over Gayle’s
itinerary for her trip and they began retracing her steps; they discovered that
she met up with a man at a diner outside of town.
Based on the waitress’s description of the guy, he looked
like more than half of the men still sitting in the diner, there was nothing unique
and he paid cash when they were done. Tim insisted on trying to lift prints,
but the dishes were already run through the dishwasher and the tables were
wiped clean after every customer.
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My life changed after I died.
It’s not like I had any special powers.
They just didn’t understand me.
They underestimated me.
I had a gift.
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this is a time to remember the heroism and
This is Memorial Day weekend in the U.S.A.
this is a time to remember the heroism and
sacrifices made by the brave men and women
of the United States Military Forces
Honor ~ Remember ~ Respect
The half-staff position of the American flag remembers the more than
one million men and women who gave their lives in service of their
country. At noon, their memory is raised by the living, who resolve
not to let their sacrifice be in vain, but to rise up in their stead and
continue the fight for liberty and justice for all.
one million men and women who gave their lives in service of their
country. At noon, their memory is raised by the living, who resolve
not to let their sacrifice be in vain, but to rise up in their stead and
continue the fight for liberty and justice for all.
6 comments:
Solid (creatively edited) intro, Chelle. Sets scene and has me wanting to know more.
So the questions, Chelle: is she still alive? Can our heroine help her?
Excellent hook. I just have to find out now!
I really enjoy this karma story and today's excerpt was quite engrossing - all the clues and the mystery! Great stuff!
Sounds like they don't have much for go on. Except, of course, for the heroine.
In a world where people are recorded near constantly, this guy is a ghost. Did he get lucky, or was it planned, I wonder.
Lots of info delivered in an interesting way that makes me want to know more. Great snippet!
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