Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday round. Every week writers post 8-to-10 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.
A long, long time ago I shared a few snippets from my Paranormal Romantic Suspense, Karma Visited (only 5) - and we didn't get a full taste of this story. Since I am working on a sequel and revisiting the story for myself, I'm sharing more with you and soaking up your comments.
Do you believe in karma? Annie Furman has a gift that allows her, while she sleeps, to visit people in their time of need - but who will be there for her when she needs help? Undersheriff Dave Turner is investigating a series of home invasions and homicides. He has no idea that solving this case will lead him to the woman of his dreams.
We're back in town where Annie and Scott live and at a (boring) town board meeting. Since we skipped over the in book intro to two characters, Old Man Hunter is one of the "good old boys" of the town and a financier of Scott's political ambitions; Sherry Pulaski is an outspoken local ecology activist. /as usual Scott has dragged Annie to the public forum to make him look better.
Creative editing alert! Here are nine lines...
Do you believe in karma? Annie Furman has a gift that allows her, while she sleeps, to visit people in their time of need - but who will be there for her when she needs help? Undersheriff Dave Turner is investigating a series of home invasions and homicides. He has no idea that solving this case will lead him to the woman of his dreams.
We're back in town where Annie and Scott live and at a (boring) town board meeting. Since we skipped over the in book intro to two characters, Old Man Hunter is one of the "good old boys" of the town and a financier of Scott's political ambitions; Sherry Pulaski is an outspoken local ecology activist. /as usual Scott has dragged Annie to the public forum to make him look better.
Creative editing alert! Here are nine lines...
Sherry Pulaski complained about a proposed pipeline that would
encroach on personal property and endanger family homesteads; it was even
planned to cut across a historical Native American burial ground.
She questioned how the town powers allowed the transaction to
get approved, she went so far as to intimate that someone was paid off and Old
Man Hunter stood and loudly bullied her from his spot in the audience. The
mayor had to rap his gavel several times and ask for order.
When the meeting came to a close, Scott turned to Hunter with
a questioning look, Hunter shook his head slightly and Scott looked away again.
As soon as the meeting was closed, Scott hurried out, Hunter followed soon
after.
“…because I told you that we have to let everything else fall
into place first.”
Annie entered the hallway in time to hear Hunter admonishing
Scott. He was waving a fat finger in Scott’s face when he saw her and motioned
that the conversation was over.
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My life changed after I died.
It’s not like I had any special powers.
They just didn’t understand me.
They underestimated me.
I had a gift.
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Beware the Ides of March
Beware the Ides of March
Julius Caesar was assassinated on March 15, 44 BC ( I am taking the history books word on this as I wasn't there that day); Caesar was previously warned to "beware the Ides of March", a date that corresponded to March 15, by a seer that prophesized his demise.
Have you ever had a premonition that has come true? I am pretty that almost every one of us (if we admit to it) has had "a feeling" about some turning point in our lives, a feeling that very well may have come true. Were the events n our lives fated, meant to be, or did our negative thoughts bring aobut our own dooms? How strong is the human pysche to see into the future?
I was raised in a family that believed in "abilities", we had dreams; my mom, no joke, read palms; and we all believed we could and did communicate with those who no longer walked the earth. While some of my acquaintances looked at me, shall we say "oddly", some other kind disbelievers reminded me that it was always good to "trust your intuition"... but wasn't that really just another word for premonition?
As writers we constantly create all kinds of semi-plausible possibilities and yet how many of you raised an eyebrow as you read my words above, how many of you truly believe the same things we want our readers to believe? And how many writers have "made up" something to go in a fiction story only to have it come to be shortly after? Are we really just a bunch of liars or do we actually have glimpses of the future?
21 comments:
Well, this sounds very realistic--for a political meeting. Some corrupt things going on behind the scenes. Good snippet, Chelle!
It took me aback that the complication of an aboriginal burial ground didn't stop the pipeline in its tracks -- it would have, back in BC. Even after 29 years in the States, I guess I still have things to learn!
He was waving a fat finger ....
Sometimes that is all you have to say to have a huge, contentious man pop into your reader's mind.
I could clearlt feel the frustration and energy, Chelle.
He was waving a fat finger ....
Sometimes that is all you have to say to have a huge, contentious man pop into your reader's mind.
I could clearlt feel the frustration and energy, Chelle.
Nice intrigue. Definitely something going on we don't know about -- and that Annie doesn't know about either (but I'm betting she's starting to suspect...).
Intriguing snippet. I enjoyed it.
Political backstabbing and maneuvering - you got the flavor exactly right, I think. I'm worried for the lady trying to buck the system here. Excellent excerpt, very realistic 'voices'.
Love the scene and what's behind it all. Very natural.
It certainly sounds like a government meeting! Neat story idea.
Oh that's not suspicious at all. /sarcasm Great snippet, Chelle. :)
Politics as usual, right? Loved the excerpt.
I agree with Siobhan! Very realistic, I could easily picture the scene-people shouting over each other, tempers flaring. Great atmosphere in the snippet!
A lot of interesting dynamics going on here. I'm interested to find out what Annie thinks of all this.
You've definitely clearly drawn the conflicts here. Lots of moving parts to keep track of. Does anyone trust any of the others at all? Makes for interesting reading, that's for sure.
Something fishy is definitely going on here!
Something was definitely done behind the scenes. No way all this is safe and properly regulated. I wonder if someone will fix it?
Very nasty political animosity. Realistic scene, especially the finger jabbing.
Definitely some shady business going on here. I'm glad Annie's on to them- hopefully she can do something about it.
What a bunch of political windbags! I hope Annie sticks it to all of them.
~Joyce Scarbrough
Crazy overload. Great snippet.
Ooooooh. Someone's hiding secrets! I wonder what he didn't want Annie to hear, probably something that would make him look bad I'm guessing. Maybe even something illegal? Can't wait to find out.
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