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A long, long time ago I shared a few snippets from my Paranormal Romantic Suspense, Karma Visited (only 5) - and we didn't get a full taste of this . Since I am working on a sequel and revisiting the story for myself, I'm sharing more with you and soaking up your comments.
Do you believe in karma? Annie Furman has a gift that allows her, while she sleeps, to visit people in their time of need - but who will be there for her when she needs help? Undersheriff Dave Turner is investigating a series of home invasions and homicides. He has no idea that solving this case will lead him to the woman of his dreams.
Annie visits Dave in another dream and they share an ALMOST NORMAL and comfortable conversation. Dave admits he is... confused by what is happening.
Creative editing alert! Here are Nine lines...
“Normally the only people
that can see me are in trouble, maybe I’m there to comfort them so they don’t
die alone.”
“That kidnapped girl didn’t
die thanks to you.”
“You were already there.”
“We didn’t know where she
was,” he leaned towards her, “it was you at that accident, wasn’t it?”
She looked away thinking
of the children in the car.
“You made that phone call,
how did you do that?”
“I woke up and called the
police.”
“And then you came back
to the scene,” Dave laughed, “if someone else was telling me that this was
happening to him I would think he was crazy.”
She bit her lip, “there
are people who think that I am crazy when I try to tell them what I’ve seen.”
“The idea freaks me out, just
do me a favor and assure me that this is real, I mean as real as it can be,” he
paused, “it is a hard concept to swallow.”
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My life changed after I died.
It’s not like I had any special powers.
They just didn’t understand me.
They underestimated me.
I had a gift.
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18 comments:
Exciting scene. Good thing the husband wasn't around. What a devil.
I don't blame either one of them for being confused. This is definitely not something you deal with every day! Great snippet.
~Joyce Scarbrough
It would be very strange. Glad they feel comfortable enough to share their feelings about it.
Glad they're figuring this out, though I don't blame Dave for struggling to come to terms with it.
Loving the story, glad they've reached a point where they can actually discuss what she does as real. Terrific!
I really like what you're doing with this.
I'm glad he seems to be taking this in stride and trying to accept it as real. He's fitting the pieces together. Nice snippet.
It is a difficult thing to wrap your brain around, but once you eliminate the impossible...
I trust Annie is going to get some of the recognition and thanks that she deserves ... and maybe more than just recognition and thanks from him. ;-)
I'm glad he believes her but I hope he doesn't reveal her ability to others.
He seems pretty calm about it, at least in his dreams.
I love that he's so calm about it and is trying to understand it. Great snippet!
I find the concept hard to understand as well .... and at the same time loving it. great snippet!
It's good that they have at least found someone who understands.
Excellent snippet, as always Chelle. I love how you craft your dialogue.
Good job showing the characters' candor about the situation. I think you've brought the reality of it out--that people would think they're crazy if they knew. :-)
Fantastic snippet, you can tell how comfortable they characters are with each other.
This is really getting interesting.
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