Saturday, September 24, 2016

A dream job? ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 09/25/16

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I'm sharing snippets from HYPHEMA, my second EMS novel. The hero in HYPHEMA was first introduced in Final Sin as the heroine's ambulance partner and best friend.

Matt Garratti, a paramedic from New York, moves his wife and son to North Carolina to work at his dream job as a flight medic. Pakistani born Sudah, his wife, receives frosty stares and insensitive comments from their new neighbors… Matt wonders if he is pursuing his dream or bringing his family into a nightmare from which they may never wake.

This snippet is from the end of the short prologue. Tony is the medical chopper pilot, Frank is a critical care flight nurse. (btw, my apologies, I had a lot going on this week, I'll do double time to get to your snippets this week) An LZ is a Landing Zone.

Creative editing (a.k.a. condensed to fit) alert!  Here are Eight lines...  

The LZ was lit up on the grounds of the hospital and Tony was preparing to put the chopper down. Matt and Frank remained quiet, all three men were communicating through the headsets in their helmets; the sound of the rotor above them would have made it too noisy to talk otherwise.
It was still his first week in the new job and only his second living in the area. It amazed him that Sudah was so supportive even though he practically yanked her and the baby from New York. She stood by him, never questioning his decision and saying goodbye to their friends without even a tear. He was going to do everything he could to make sure this worked.

Matt felt the EC 145 bank hard to the right as Tony brought the bird around. His harness held him securely in the seat, he smiled as he watched the landscape grow bigger and realized that he was finally in his dream job.

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What's It Like to be a Paramedic?

Being a Paramedic, an EMT, or any emergency first responder can be euphoric when a call goes well. There is probably nothing greater than delivering a healthy baby, bringing someone "back" when their heart had stopped, or pulling someone from a disastrous car wreck, packaging her the best you can because she has no more feeling in her legs, and hearing that she walked down her wedding aisle just six months later.

Being a first responder can also be devastating when you hear a child's last breath, have to pronounce a young mother who collapsed in front of her children, or get literally pounded on by a grieving family member while you are doing CPR and knowing he's not coming back.

While both of my EMS novels, Final Sin and Hyphema, are works of fiction, many of the emergency scenes are "real" and so are the emotional highs and lows. I dedicate both stories to the heroic devotion of all first responders.


Amy Braun said...

Nice snippet that gives a lot of info! :)

Charmaine Gordon said...

Dynamite beginning. You pull the reader right into the scene and never let go. Thanks, Chelle.

Diane Burton said...

Guys never (a generalization) realize how hard it is uprooting the family for their dream job. I hope it's worth the upheaval. Good snippet.

Unknown said...

Sounds like his job is great so far. I have a feeling the rest of life won't be so cooperative.

Anonymous said...

You've convinced me you've done your homework about what it's like to be a copter pilot. One question, though. If two of the guys were silent, how could all three of them be communicating via headphones?

Jessica E. Subject said...

It is hard for any family to uproot from what they know. I do hope his dream job is all he hopes it will be. Nice snippet!

Elizabeth Alsobrooks said...

Ed, why do guys (a generalization) forget that listening is part of communication? Nice snippet here. I like the description of the flying and how it makes him feel--and that he appreciates her sacrifice.

Unknown said...

It might be his dream job, and she may be supportive, but that doesn't mean everything will go smoothly, I bet. Life has a way of throwing in some challenges.

Veronica Scott said...

An exciting beginning, feels so realistic in the way you've described the scene. Excellent excerpt!

Teresa Cypher said...

Loads of tension in this story--to weigh his longing against his wife's happiness and safety. Well done!