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I'm sharing snippets from HYPHEMA, my second EMS novel. The hero in HYPHEMA was first introduced in Final Sin as the heroine's ambulance partner and best friend.
Matt Garratti, a paramedic from New York, moves his wife and son to North Carolina to work at his dream job as a flight medic. Pakistani born Sudah, his wife, receives frosty stares and insensitive comments from their new neighbors… Matt wonders if he is pursuing his dream or bringing his family into a nightmare from which they may never wake.
This snippet is from the beginning of the story.
Creative editing (a.k.a. condensed to fit) alert! Here are Eight lines...
Matt was looking down over the dark water as they were being buffeted by the winds.
“It’s always choppy over here,” shouted the pilot.
They had just finished their pre-flight check when they got banged out on an emergency transport job. the patient, a diabetic male in his forties, was in distress after being pinned under a car in a freakish accident, he needed immediate transport to a level one trauma center.
North Carolina’s Outer Banks had a reputation for beauty and serenity, Matt was thinking of taking Sudah and Aden there for a weekend jaunt soon.
The area was served by a state of the art hospital center so any injured or sick could be treated there without the hour-and-a-half commute a car would need, with a serious trauma, patients could at least be stabilized, and air transportation used to one of the trauma centers inland.
“Have you ever been out here before Matt?”
“Nope, first time,” Matt had not ventured far from New York where he grew up until he decided to move his family to North Carolina after a job offer from NC Air EMS.
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