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Welcome to a snippet from
Within the Law. The protagonist, Tom Hughes, was created in
His Lucky Charm (
formerly called Forgotten). Tom is cousin to the female main character in HLC. I fell in love with Tom, I think he
might be my favorite hero from all of my books. His character and his history was so compelling that I HAD to write his story, one in which he has his own HEA.
While Tom is outside the bar, letting the night air sober him again, he hears a woman's sobbing. Investigating he finds a woman who's fallen and hurt her ankle. Despite his assumption that she is on the street at that late hour for less than honorable reasons, he tries to be gallant if not a bit pushy. When she stumbles again, Tom takes matters into his own hands, literally.
Sorry, I had to do a bit (ok, a lot) of creative punctuation & editing to make it fit:
“Put me down.”
“Yeah... sure,” he walked over to his car and put her down next
to it, “you have your choice, I can drive you home or you can try to hobble
along these dark streets by yourself. I can assure you I have no interest in
attacking you; I can’t guarantee anyone else you might run into in this neighborhood
at this hour.”
She turned her head to look around, a few men stumbled out of
the bar and headed in the opposite direction, “I don’t live far from here.”
Their raucous laughter seemed to unnerve her; he noticed her slender hands
which seemed much more suited to typing at a desk than defending herself on a
dark urban street.
“So it won’t be a long drive,” he unlocked the passenger side
door of his car and was pleased that he got the key in on the first try; he
uttered silent thanks that his hands were steady enough and he wasn’t really
feeling any of the affects of the alcohol, “by the way, my name is Tom.”
She sat in the car and just before he closed the door she cautiously
smiled, “thank you Tom.” He couldn’t explain why, but he knew that was the kind
of smile he would remember and enjoy.
Tom gave up on ever falling in love again the day that he buried his high school sweetheart and fiancé. He started a career in law enforcement just so that he could find her murderer and rapist. Just when he is about to see justice done, he meets Alli Davis-the defense attorney for the murdering rapist who took his love from him.
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