The detectives stormed into Sam's office for an impromptu interrogation. They summoned Ben to join them and he's just arrived. We're picking up just a few sentences in from last week's snippet - once more back to A Chaunce of Riches (with creative punctuation):
“These nice
detectives were just about to tell me about some information they have; supposedly this information will help to explain why they are wasting our
time,” Sam tried not to sound too snippy.
“Mr. Johnson, when
did you first learn that the Chaunces were back in town?”
“When my agency
sent me there on an assignment...”
“And when did you
first meet Julian Chaunce?”
“I never did.”
“How did you feel
when you found out that your girlfriend had run off with Chaunce?”
“It was upsetting
that she left me, but I didn’t know who she had left with until recently,” Ben
cocked his head to the side impatiently, “what’s this about?”
“Did you hold any
animosity towards Chaunce?”
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The day that Ben Johnson was hired as a bodyguard for some rich widow and her kid, he never expected to be working for the woman who had abandoned him just when he had needed her the most so many years before. Damn it all, he still wanted her.
Samantha Chaunce never thought she would see him again. She never thought she would have to explain why she married the rich man over the man she had sworn she once loved. And she certainly never expected to find out that her rich husband had been murdered and fingers were pointing to her former lover.
13 comments:
That's a funny question, because you don't like someone doesn't mean that you necessarily killed him.
Great interrogation! Love the final question. That's a nice way to hook us at the end and bring us back for more! :)
Suspenseful and makes the reader want more. That's what writing is all about and you've got our attention.
Your dialogue is so crisp, so sharp that it sets the mood perfectly. Wonderfully done, Chelle! I really like the blurb. :-)
"Tried not to sound snippy" and failed! Though I'd be annoyed, too--or maybe scared.
I see where the detectives are going... getting dumped is a motive for all kinds of bad deeds, not that everyone murders their ex or their ex's new partner.
Uh oh, he'd better be careful what he says, since the line of questioning is getting so pointed. Excellent excerpt!
Very tense! I like how you're drawing this out over a few weeks, keeps us wondering who's going to let what spill ;-)
Ben's a classic suspect all right. Let's hope the police won't stop looking!
Hmm, interesting. He's a suspect. Is she a suspect too? Lots of tension in these eight.
Obviously they're looking for motive.
Such a nice brisk pace to this. Great bit of dialogue!
Great dialogue and great way to leave us hanging :) Nice 8.
Well, well, well, I do believe someone suspects him! Great 8!
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