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Welcome to a snippet from Courage of the Heart. Courage of the Heart was originally published by Xlibris in 1999 (BEFORE they went full vanity press) - with no real marketing efforts from the publisher and before I knew much about the subject, it didn't do very well. However it was revised slightly and republished by Vanilla Heart Publishing in 2009 and has enjoyed a healthier reception.
The opening scene, actually the prologue, opens with our hero, Adam, and our heroine, Davie, in bed about to make love for the first time. However Davie confesses something to Adam... and his reaction is certainly not what she expected. Creative punctuation has been used (of course) so it is only 8 sentences:
Davie felt another shudder run through her, "but, I don't know…Adam, I," she inhaled sharply as she felt his fingers probing inside her, "Adam…I've never…"
For the first time Adam remained motionless, "never…what?"
"I've…never been with a man before," she sensed his withdrawal before he actually pulled away.
Adam's brow was furrowed, "what are you saying, Davie?"
The icy chill that Davie felt left her feeling embarrassed to be lying naked in bed with this man, she pulled the bedsheet over her exposed breasts, "I've never been with a man…before"
He sat upright in bed seemingly unaware that he was just as naked as she was, "are you telling me that you're a virgin?"
Davie sat up clutching the bed linens tightly to her body, "yes."
"Damnation," Adam got up from the bed angrily, "you couldn't have told me that before?"
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