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I'm introducing snippets from More Than a Friend, a part of The Many Faces of Chelle Cordero, a short-story collection which exemplifies (I hope) the diversity of my writing.
More Than a Friend is a short story based on a manuscript of the same name (which has never been published) This manuscript was co-authored by my sister, Barbara Cordero Du-Bois, and me. I re-wrote it as a short story because I wanted my characters to LIVE.
Newly widowed and numb, Janice went back to work and is trying to move on with her life when she is summoned to her mother-in-law's place for dinner. Emotions went awry and the scene got ugly. Despite Loretta's animosity to her, Janice understands that Loretta is in deep mourning for her son ...the 8 sentences:
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More Than a Friend is a short story based on a manuscript of the same name (which has never been published) This manuscript was co-authored by my sister, Barbara Cordero Du-Bois, and me. I re-wrote it as a short story because I wanted my characters to LIVE.
Newly widowed and numb, Janice went back to work and is trying to move on with her life when she is summoned to her mother-in-law's place for dinner. Emotions went awry and the scene got ugly. Despite Loretta's animosity to her, Janice understands that Loretta is in deep mourning for her son ...the 8 sentences:
Janis stood to try to comfort her, but her mother-in-law’s
cold stare literally stopped her. “Billy told me that you and he had an
argument the night before he was killed and you threw him out.”
“Billy walked out, he said he needed space.” Janis remembered
the door slamming behind him as she sat on the floor crying.
“You never tried to stop him,” Loretta screeched at Janis.
“Momma, please calm down,” Mandy seemed at a loss of what to
say.
Loretta looked at Mandy and cried even harder, “They argued
about her damn friendship with Jerry — Jerry this and Jerry that. I wish that
boy had never come into our lives.”
More Than a Friend
and share a lifetime together?
More Than a Friend
Can best friends become loversand share a lifetime together?
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The Many Faces of Chelle Cordero is a single author collection of short stories featuring Introduction, Pussycat Tails, Holiday Happiness, Not Alone, I Swear That Raccoon Just Knocked on the Door, Stormy Weather, A Mother’s Love, More Than a Friend, The Meeting, The Vacation and a special bonus section.
Remembering the victims of
the Charlie Hebdo massacre
the Charlie Hebdo massacre
Frédéric Boisseau, 42
Franck Brinsolaro, 49
Cabu (Jean Cabut), 76
Elsa Cayat, 54
Charb (Stéphane Charbonnier), 47
Philippe Honoré, 74
Bernard Maris, 68
Ahmed Merabet, 42
Moustapha Ourrad
Michel Renaud, 69
Tignous (Bernard Verlhac), 57
Georges Wolinski, 80
We can never be sure
that the opinion
we are endeavoring to stifle
is a false opinion; and if we were sure,
stifling it would be an evil still.
we are endeavoring to stifle
is a false opinion; and if we were sure,
stifling it would be an evil still.
~John Stuart Mill, On Liberty, 1859
8 comments:
Too often tragedy lies just around the corner. Every country is open to attack. Where are the good old days when all we had were mobsters? Pray for our kids rowing up in a world like this.
Touching snippet, Chelle. I wanted to smack the lady upside her head even though she's grieving.
Love this eight Chelle! It really hits you. Oh those mother-in-laws. I'm thankful that I have a good one now, but every once in a while we do have those off moments. :)
Filled with emotion and tension. Great snippet.
I know Loretta's hurting, that was her baby, but she should recognize that Janis is grieving too. It sucks that people lash out when they're in pain.
Great job with this eight, Chelle. As much as I want to hit Loretta with something, I can sympathize too.
“They argued about her damn friendship with Jerry — Jerry this and Jerry that. I wish that boy had never come into our lives.”
I could hear that, Chelle! Very real. Nicely done!
I wonder if the mother is blaming her daughter in law because she doesn't want to blame herself? But I suspect it wouldn't matter even if she'd try to stop him from leaving.
Great emotion and tension.
Such a sad situation but very realistic, I think. Well done snippet.
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