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This scene is still at the shopping mall. While Justin is paying for a camcorder he's buying so Layne can record Dennis in his school play, Layne realizes that her son isn't by her side. (this might be a bit choppy, I wanted to fit it all in to a certain point)
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"Where's Dennis," Layne started calling his name in a panic.
Justin questioned salespeople on the floor; one woman, assuming the three were a normal family out for the day, told him that his son was over by the video game display.
"Layne, I found him," Justin guided her over to the video games; she saw Dennis and grabbed the little boy's arm.
"Don't ever do that again," she was on the verge of tears.
"Mommy," Dennis was startled and began to cry.
"Oh God. I'm sorry baby," she hugged him and cried, "I was so scared that somebody had taken you away."
Justin told the salesman he'd be right back for the packages, he put an arm around Layne and took Dennis by the hand to guide them out of the store.
Dennis was still protesting, he didn't understand what he had done to upset his mother so badly.
At the car Justin knelt in front of Dennis, "You must never scare your mom like that again, don't walk away from her in a crowded place." Wanting to take care of this woman and child was a strange feeling for him.
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