Saturday, August 8, 2015

Dreams? ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 08/09/15

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My entry this week is from Common Bond, Tangled Hearts. Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son. 

We're jumping ahead a bit. Layne told Justin about the forced insemination by a man she married for protection after being in the foster system. She has been living under an assumed name so he won't find her and never filed for divorce in order to keep hiding. Justin and she have grown closer (yes, intimate) and spending time together with their son (who does not know Justin is his father). The following scene is during a shopping trip Justin is treating them to. Justin just asked Layne if there is something she wants, anything she's dreamt of having...

  (the following has been edited to fit)  ...and now the eight nine ten:

Layne shrugged, "people like me don't have dreams, Justin."

"Come on, everybody has dreams."

"Maybe, when I was a little girl," she laughed, "I wanted to invent a robot to collect the eggs on the farm so I could stay in bed later." Her voice faded, "after my grandma died, I just dreamt that I would wake up on the farm again."

Justin knew how difficult things had been; she told him about being bounced around between foster homes and how she met Charlie.

"And now, Layne, do you have dreams now?"

Her eyes welled with tears, "actually yes, I dream that I will always be able to protect my son. I dream that I'll always be here for him and that he'll never be so desperate for a hero that... he'll do something totally stupid. I dream that I can do something to shield him from people who will just use him."

Justin put his arm around her shoulder and leaned down close to her ear, "Layne, I'll do whatever I can to help you."


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About Common Bond, Tangled Hearts

Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son.
Justin, the victim of a fraternity prank, and Layne, the subject of a forced insemination, have produced a beautiful child that they are both willing to protect… at all costs.
The two parents realize they can love each other, but when Layne’s abusive “ex-husband” shows up, they are torn apart by danger, kidnapping and lies. Justin won’t give up until Layne is returned to him. Layne uses her newfound strength, courage and knowledge to defy Charlie’s ugliest demands.




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Today is our daughter's birthday. 
She's a grown woman, married, highly skilled and
 working in a job where she literally saves people lives.
Her "baby brother" is also an adult, married and
working in an equally responsible position.

I can relate to Layne's need to want
to always protect your child,
to always want only the best for her or him.
That's a feeling that is a part of parenting
every minute of every day.

Happy Birthday to our darling Jenni,
you've brought magic to our lives.

20 comments:

Iris Blobel said...

Beautifully dream ... let's hope it'll come true!

Linda said...

I like how he is such a good guy. I hope soon they'll be able to make dreams together.

Author, Neva Rodriguez said...

Nice! She seems absolutely broken and he's just the man to fix it. On a side note, Growing up I always wanted a "Rosie" like from the Jetsons, so I can relate to her robot idea.

Kim Magennis said...

Poor Layne!
Life has chewed her up and spat her out!
I can see our hero has his work cut out for him.

Charmaine Gordon said...

The good man is about to be challenged. Heartwarming story. I'm overwhelmed by both of the main characters.

Happy B'day to Jenni and many more, with love.

Sarah W said...

You're just outright yanking on my heartstrings, now, Chelle. :)

I certainly hope his family doesn't want to use that child!

tinachristopherauthor.com said...

Wow, another emotional and a little heart-breaking scene. Great job!

Sara Barnard said...

What wonderful insight into her mind -- and the mind of many single parents. Beautiful job, albeit a bit heartbreaking.

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Oh I do hope her dream will come true and he helps her to obtain it. Lovely snippet with hope for the future.

Veronica Scott said...

She has very good, motherly dreams all right! Quite a heart tugging snippet and I'm so glad she has Justin to help her!

FC Etier said...

Sounds like those conscious desires we think about while awake.
We call them "dreams."
It isn't the dreams we experience while we're asleep.
I often like the conscious ones better.
Your snippet sparked a sweet personal reverie, thanks!
Nice 8!

Jennifer Reynolds said...

She's such a great mother. I hope he does everything he promises. :)

P.T.Wyant said...

Awwwww! (I hope he buys her a farm. I'm weird. I know.)

Nancy Gideon said...

Such a gentle, powerful scene. Really like these two! Suggestion: Watch your dialogue to make sure you capitalize the sentences within the quotes. Taking off my editor hat now . . .

Ed Hoornaert said...

One of your best snippets yet, Chelle. Layne's final words say so much about her life, her mindset, and what she needs to learn in the course of the book.

Caitlin Stern said...

What heartbreakingly simple dreams... Makes you hope he can help her achieve them!

Elaine Cantrell said...

I'm really liking him and hoping he'll take care of her jerk husband for her.

Teresa Cypher said...

I love these lines: "Maybe, when I was a little girl," she laughed, "I wanted to invent a robot to collect the eggs on the farm so I could stay in bed later." Her voice faded, "after my grandma died, I just dreamt that I would wake up on the farm again." Beautiful. Poignant. Wonderful snippet, Chelle. :-)

dmorgana said...

Ooooh, the heartstrings have been tugged. So much emotion packed into those sentences of her dream. Beautifully done, Chelle.

JTsuruoka said...

No dreams? That's just... sad. Very sad, and very powerful as an image. It really sets up the rest of the snippet well too.