Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday round. Every week writers post 8-to-10 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.
Last week Justin was drugged on morphine and beaten until 2 ribs were broken, the PI his family hired to find Layne went missing, and Charlie had Layne and Dennis kidnapped and brought to his house in Philadelphia.
This will be the last week I'm posting from Common Bond, Tangled Hearts as I've reached the permitted limit...
(the following has been creatively edited to fit) ...and now the
Charlie
had almost every toy a six-year-old boy could ever want, Dennis felt like he
had been let loose in his own personal toy store. Layne regretted the fact that
she hadn’t been able to provide a better life for her son
so that he wouldn’t have been bewitched by the glitter.
Layne
was waiting in Charlie's study just as he had instructed, he made it sound
ominous.
Charlie
finally walked into his den and closed the door behind him.
He tossed a large envelope onto the coffee table
in front of her, "before we start our discussion I would suggest you look
inside that folder."
She
opened the envelope and gasped. Inside were photos, obviously taken through the fire escape window the night before, there were graphic shots of her and Justin making love.
"It's
a shame that you and your lover didn't pull the blinds. Unless you cooperate,
you will find yourself out on the street once again while I raise the boy
without you."
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About Common Bond, Tangled Hearts
Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son.
Justin, the victim of a fraternity prank, and Layne, the subject of a forced insemination, have produced a beautiful child that they are both willing to protect… at all costs.
The two parents realize they can love each other, but when Layne’s abusive “ex-husband” shows up, they are torn apart by danger, kidnapping and lies. Justin won’t give up until Layne is returned to him. Layne uses her newfound strength, courage and knowledge to defy Charlie’s ugliest demands.
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17 comments:
You can't stop here :-) Another one of your books which I definitely have to read. Great snippet ....
You always seem to find a way to make Layne's situation worse, you meanie! ;-)
I wasn't expecting blackmail. Nice twist!
He's got her. What else can she do? She needs a rescuer, and fast. :-)
No snippet for me this week, Chelle. :-)
Wow, I agree with Teresa, she needs a rescuer fast! Poor girl, I probably wouldn't have stopped to pull the blinds either. Great scene!
What a nasty piece of work! And a formidable enemy. What a horrid mess! Watching her get out of this would be interesting, indeed!
What a nasty piece of work! And a formidable enemy. What a horrid mess! Watching her get out of this would be interesting, indeed!
I loved this line: "Layne regretted the fact that she hadn’t been able to provide a better life for her son so that he wouldn’t have been bewitched by the glitter."
I think mom's feel this universally. What I've noticed, though, is kids are smarter than we give them credit for.
Wow, he's playing hardball! What a tense (and terrible) place to leave it.
She's on the horns of a Dilemma and that's bad. Somehow I feel her lover and real father of the child will find a way to save them
He's not exactly right--just because she had an affair, after her husband was so horrible--wouldn't mean she'd lose custody. Still, she probably shouldn't cross this jerk.
I can't stand this guy! Lovely characterization.
SSSSSSSS! What a snake. Really leaves us hanging.
Oh dear, this guy does NOT play fair! Enjoyed all the twists and turns of the story that you shared with us, and this was another excellent excerpt.
Yikes! Talk about putting one's cards on the table-- literally. Powerful snippet. You've done a great job here, really making the reader feel the sensation of having the chair pulled out from under you.
Damn! He is going straight at it!
Oh that &$%?@!#!! Wow, I really hate this guy. Manipulative and conniving *BLEEP*. Poor Layne. I hope she finds a way out of this, and that Justin finds them and kicks this guy's ass.
And what's this about the last snippet?! AHH! You can't leave us on a cliffhanger!
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