Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday round. Every week writers post 8-to-10 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.
A long, long time ago I shared a few snippets from my Paranormal Romantic Suspense, Karma Visited (only 5) - and we didn't get a full taste of this story. Since I am working on a sequel and revisiting the story for myself, I'm sharing more with you and soaking up your comments.
Do you believe in karma? Annie Furman has a gift that allows her, while she sleeps, to visit people in their time of need - but who will be there for her when she needs help? Undersheriff Dave Turner is investigating a series of home invasions and homicides. He has no idea that solving this case will lead him to the woman of his dreams.
I am skipping ahead a bit to the first "scene" with Annie (remember Annie and Dave haven't met yet) - this is in her "POV", and I did a lot of creative editing to make this fit today.
Creative editing alert! Here are ten lines...
Do you believe in karma? Annie Furman has a gift that allows her, while she sleeps, to visit people in their time of need - but who will be there for her when she needs help? Undersheriff Dave Turner is investigating a series of home invasions and homicides. He has no idea that solving this case will lead him to the woman of his dreams.
I am skipping ahead a bit to the first "scene" with Annie (remember Annie and Dave haven't met yet) - this is in her "POV", and I did a lot of creative editing to make this fit today.
Creative editing alert! Here are ten lines...
Tears streaked down her cheeks and left lines on her soot stained
cheeks, the children were safe, she made sure of that and I let her know I admired
her bravery.
She stood again and tried to shake the bars free from the window. Safety
bars, those bars were meant to keep evil out and now all they did was trap her
in.
One by one she made sure that her charges would be alright, they were
safe, and now it was time for her to die.
Coughs seized her body, flames were licking the walls. We were both
scared, but I knew I had no reason to fear for myself.
We could hear the sirens of the approaching fire trucks, her eyes were
haunted as she looked at me and I prayed that the smoke would claim her before
the flames; my prayers were answered.
As the burning ceiling above us sent flaming stalactites raining down,
I knew she was at peace.
Annie bolted upright in bed and
gasped as she tried to catch her breath. There were no flames and no smoke, but
the smell still assaulted her nostrils and her throat felt raw.
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My life changed after I died.
It’s not like I had any special powers.
They just didn’t understand me.
They underestimated me.
I had a gift.
~~~~~
I was raised in a family of Believers - we believed in
spirits, ESP, fortune telling, and the ability to
communicate telepathically.
spirits, ESP, fortune telling, and the ability to
communicate telepathically.
My parents, my grandmother, my sister and I all had "experiences" and no one questioned the reality. I had very vivid dreams of things happening in places I wasn't in and several times, after I told my parents what I dreamt (some nightmares) we would go through the day almost forgetting the dreams... until we would be listening to the evening TV news.
I had almost the same nightmare Annie had in this snippet and that night there was a news report of a young and heroic teen-age babysitter who died in an apartment fire early that morning after dropping the baby she was caring for through the gated window to a stranger's arms on the sidewalk. It shook us all up to hear the tragic tale I related that morning on the TV channel.
While my character's "abilities" are much more involved than mine ever were, I related very strongly to her as I wrote the story. In some ways I think I put more of myself into Annie than any other character and needless to say I was more anxious as to how she would be received by readers than other characters.
While no one has been able to conclusively prove or disprove the existence of these other-wordly happenings, many of us can tell of strange occurrences, that sudden deja-vu, visits with loved ones while we slept, and foreboding premonitions. Those who are more comfortable with denial call it coincidence... the rest of us call it a Gift.
9 comments:
I can tell that this gift of hers is going to play havoc with her sleep.
Wow, Chelle! That was some 'dream'. I love how this story is unwinding. I look forward to reading much more.
Wow, Chelle! That was some 'dream'. I love how this story is unwinding. I look forward to reading much more.
Fun action scene...enjoyed the snippet.
So real, I felt the flames and then Annie wakes up. What happens next. I have the book but all wewriwa readers want to know and now. . .about her Gift.
Powerful snippet. That's one heck of a dream!
What a terrible waste of life. Those bars ought to have some sort of safety feature!
Oh my gosh this was intense and beautiful at the same time. I find it interesting that she's able to visit through her dreams, thank God she's able to wake up. Great writing! :)
You really pulled me in, Chelle. I was so relieved when I realized that it was a dream.
That is bizarre about your own dream, and then it all but came true.
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