Saturday, March 19, 2016

Getting to know Dave ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 03/20/16

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A long, long time ago I shared a few snippets from my Paranormal Romantic Suspense, Karma Visited (only 5) - and we didn't get a full taste of this story. Since I am working on a sequel and revisiting the story for myself, I'm sharing more with you and soaking up your comments.

Do you believe in karma? Annie Furman has a gift that allows her, while she sleeps, to visit people in their time of need - but who will be there for her when she needs help? Undersheriff Dave Turner is investigating a series of home invasions and homicides. He has no idea that solving this case will lead him to the woman of his dreams.

Creative editing alert!  Here are eight lines... 

Only two of the four desks were currently occupied, his and his partner’s; two patrol cars were out in the small town. Once upon a time he thought he had found heaven on earth, a nice small town where he could continue his law enforcement career without all the ugliness he saw as a detective in Chicago.
After eleven years he found himself becoming apathetic and detached after dealing with junkies, abused wives who kept going back to their husbands, missing kids that turned up dead on the side of a road, hookers who were terrified of disappointing their pimps, thieves and arsonists. His indifference became a way of life even when he wasn’t at the job.
Indifference destroyed his marriage too, although he had come to realize that while he missed the idea of being married, he certainly didn’t miss the woman he was married to. She had done him a favor the day she got fed up, Rose walked out and never looked back. He didn’t have much of a chance to miss her or feel guilty for long, not the way she had her lawyer come after him. She wound up keeping most of what he used to own and it made leaving his old life behind a lot easier.
  
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My life changed after I died.
It’s not like I had any special powers.
They just didn’t understand me.
They underestimated me.
I had a gift.

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Did you check out a NEW feature I am trying on this blog?


Every Wednesday I am going to post a random picture I find online 

(and yes, I will make sure not to violate any copyrights)
and I will ask everyone to contribute to a "story" by adding a 
sentence in the comments.

We'll see how much interest this fun post gets 
Come back every Wednesday and play along
then come back and read the comments

Here's the first random pic
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21 comments:

dmorgana said...

Ouch! Poor guy, sounds like a rough divorce, but maybe one for the better? Of course, not in the short run I'd say, but the long run could hold potential. Still, it's hard to just leave a whole life behind and start over.

Linda said...

That sounds like a really pathetic life to live. I can understand that his empathy disappeared at some point but a life without emotion isn't really a life.

Ed Hoornaert said...

Since this post is about kharma, may I assume he's done some truly rotten stuff in a former life? (Actually, I'm pretty sure that ISN"T why you brought up kharma...) ;-)

Iris B said...

Nice insight into his life. Sounds like an interesting story already.

Kim Magennis said...

So real Chelle. The slippery slope to hell on earth. Hope he gets his 'wonder' back.

Kim Magennis said...

So real Chelle. The slippery slope to hell on earth. Hope he gets his 'wonder' back.

T. M. Hunter said...

Down on his luck, and getting beat even farther with every moment...sounds like a rough life. Hope things turn around for him. Good snippet.

Paula Millhouse said...

Isn't it sad how indifference can leech into a person's whole life. Great snippet, Chelle.

Charmaine Gordon said...

Beautiful insight into his life. You've painted a terrific picture here of sorrow and disillusion. No way to go but up!

Siobhan Muir said...

At least he sees the blessings available to him. Good snippet, Chelle.

Sara Barnard said...

It sounds like he has a healthy mindset for a fresh start. Really drew me in!

Veronica Scott said...

Wow, his life is kind of bleak but I can imagine when he only sees the ugly underside of life it's hard to stay positive. Really a compelling snippet and left me feeling I know this guy.

P.T.Wyant said...

Sounds like he needed a better divorce attorney. I hope something happens to turn around his jaded attitude -- that's no way to live.

The Belle in Blue said...

You know, usually I find long passages of narrative a bit boring, but this one pulled me in and held my interest throughout. I guess it's because I empathized with him on everything. Great snippet!

~Joyce Scarbrough

tinachristopherauthor.com said...

Oh my, his ex doesn't sound very friendly. Great snippet that tells the reader a lot about Dave.

Jennifer Powell Reynolds said...

Great intro to what sounds like a jaded character.

Teresa Cypher said...

Fantastic character building, Chelle. He's got a lot to overcome...

Elaine Cantrell said...

Sounds like he's had a rough time of it.

Caitlin Stern said...

He sounds ripe for some intervention! That's definitely a life that could use a little perking up.

JTsuruoka said...

This is a very well-written bit of character study. You get all of the pertinent information in with plenty of hooks for plotlines to build...

Emmy Gatrell said...

Great snippet. Poor guy but it sounds like he's better off.