Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday round. Every week writers post 8-to-10 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.
A long, long time ago I shared a few snippets from my Paranormal Romantic Suspense, Karma Visited (only 5) - and we didn't get a full taste of this story. Since I am working on a sequel and revisiting the story for myself, I'm sharing more with you and soaking up your comments.
Do you believe in karma? Annie Furman has a gift that allows her, while she sleeps, to visit people in their time of need - but who will be there for her when she needs help? Undersheriff Dave Turner is investigating a series of home invasions and homicides. He has no idea that solving this case will lead him to the woman of his dreams.
Last week Dave and Annie "met" and neither one could believe it. Annie is no longer dreaming, she can't understand how that Sheriff saw her and spoke to her - normally people only saw her when a life was in danger...
Creative editing alert! Here are nine lines...
Annie was shaking as she sat on the side of her bed
while Scott was puttering around the room getting dressed and slamming the
drawers shut as he took what he needed.
“Are you going to sit there all day?”
“No, I’ll go get your breakfast made,” she couldn’t
look at him, she was afraid he’d see the truth and call her crazy
again. She slid off of the bed and dug her toes into the soft plush carpeting.
“Just coffee, I’m in a hurry.”
Annie slipped her robe and slippers on and left the
room.
She watched the dark brown liquid as the coffee
dripped into the pot as she wondered how that man could see her? He spoke to
her, he heard her, and how the hell had he seen her at the accident? How did he
have that kind of power?
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My life changed after I died.
It’s not like I had any special powers.
They just didn’t understand me.
They underestimated me.
I had a gift.
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Just for fun trivia
If you like chocolate pudding, then today is your day!
June 26 is National Chocolate Pudding Day
In 1934, General Foods (Jello) introduced chocolate pudding mix as “Walter Baker’s Dessert.”
Just for fun trivia
If you like chocolate pudding, then today is your day!
June 26 is National Chocolate Pudding Day
In 1934, General Foods (Jello) introduced chocolate pudding mix as “Walter Baker’s Dessert.”
How do you like to eat your chocolate pudding?
Personally I like slivered strawberries and a nice big dollop of whipped cream on top.
Yumm, my mouth is watering just thinking about this.
Don't you think this would make a very romantic dessert for two?
What is your favorite dessert?
20 comments:
How indeed. The plot thickens. Nice snippet.
She's definitely shaken. I wonder how long it'll be until they "meet" again. Great snippet!
Intriguing! I love the premise of this story
I wonder if he is as shaken as she is? I suspect not, which begs her question. And the question of what he is going to do about it
I wonder if he is as shaken as she is? I suspect not, which begs her question. And the question of what he is going to do about it
Good question.
And so far I'm pretty sure I don't like Scott.
I hope she meets that man again soon. She needs someone better in her life.
Things are getting intense. Great snippet. Can't wait to find out more.
Intriguing! How can he see, indeed? Looking forward to more.
Do you just hate it when the established rules change in mid step? I don't blame her for being upset ... though I suspect it will turn out all right.
Yes, I'd like to know too!
Curiouser and curiouser! I'd be confused too.
~Joyce Scarbrough
Maybe the other guy is like her.
The plot thickens and I'm betting he's just as surprised. Great snippet, Chelle. :)
She's the one with the power though, right?
I can't help wondering if he sees her any differently than he sees regular people. Does he even know she's different?
Interesting questions ... adding to the already intriguing story. Look forward to more.
Interesting that she assumes it's his power, not hers. Really enjoying the story, so well done. Great snippet, with the everyday routine contrasted to the uncanny events!
That's exactly what I'm wondering as well! I hope we get the answer to that question.
Yes! How?!
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