Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday round. Every week writers post 8-to-10 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.
A long, long time ago I shared a few snippets from my Paranormal Romantic Suspense, Karma Visited (only 5) - and we didn't get a full taste of this story. Since I am working on a sequel and revisiting the story for myself, I'm sharing more with you and soaking up your comments.
Do you believe in karma? Annie Furman has a gift that allows her, while she sleeps, to visit people in their time of need - but who will be there for her when she needs help? Undersheriff Dave Turner is investigating a series of home invasions and homicides. He has no idea that solving this case will lead him to the woman of his dreams.
Last week Annie found herself in a room with the kidnapped girl when "some force" seemed to pull her away. This week she is outside where there is a lot of police activity... I had to edit a lot out in order to make this piece of action fit.
Creative editing alert! Here are ten lines...
Gunfire noise startled Annie, she was
no longer in the room with the girl; she watched as a man running from the nearby
house went down after another shot sounded.
“We have no clue where the girl is,”
Dave was coming around the shed and shouting directions to the other officers.
Annie tucked herself even tighter
against the wall of the weathered shed and looked at the face of the man lying
on the ground, “that’s not him,” she whispered.
“What did you say,” Dave stopped
short when he saw her, raising his handgun towards her, “who are you?”
She paused and looked at the gun in
his hand, “you can see me, how can you see me?”
“Of course I can see you, where is
the girl?”
“Hey Boss, there’s no one else in the
house,” Tim and another officer jogged over to Dave, they both looked at his
raised handgun curiously, “everything okay?”
Dave noticed that neither man
acknowledged the woman he was speaking to, he slowly lowered the handgun, “any
sign of the victim?”
“There’s another guy,” Annie said the
words out loud and motioned to the shed they were standing next to, “there’s
a secret room.”
Dave heard her, the others didn’t; Dave
felt compelled to repeat her words.
~~~~~
For more WeWriWa Snippets, go to:
My life changed after I died.
It’s not like I had any special powers.
They just didn’t understand me.
They underestimated me.
I had a gift.
Buy Links
If you live in America or listen to news reports in other countries, you probably are aware that we know have our "presumptive" major party candidates ~ and let the FaceBook battles begin!
Okay, not really begin, it's been going on a while as we whittled the selections down. But now we are certainly in the middle of a world-wide head-turning reality show.
I wonder if anyone has truly changed their intended vote based on the arguments and postings on our FaceBook pages?
Without pushing for the candidate of my choice, I am going to try to influence every American of voting age to make sure you are registered and actually get out to vote. (and if you are overseas or traveling, make sure that you get your absentee ballots mailed IN TIME) Although a lot of people say it doesn't matter who WE vote for, the electoral college actually decides, our votes DO influence the decision.
As a matter of fact, historically the ONLY times that the electoral college decision has not agreed with the popular vote was when the tallies were really close and usually combined with low voter turnout. So if you really want to have a voice in choosing the next American President — VOTE.
We have two controversial candidates running, even if you have to vote for the "lesser of the evils" remember that if you DON'T vote, you might as well be casting a vote for the other candidate.
In the meanwhile let's try to be a bit gentle on Social Media. Informed debate is always healthy - name calling and broken friendships are NOT.
21 comments:
Yay! He saw her! Now she can start making a difference. Excellent snippet, Chelle.
Yay! He saw her! Now she can start making a difference. Excellent snippet, Chelle.
Beyond wonderful. What an amazing scene. Thank you, Chelle
Lovely snippet, Chelle!
Oh, good- she's figuring out how to make this work. Tricky for Dave, though!
Fascinating scene. I'm hooked.
Ooh, he saw her but nobody else did. This definitely gives them a bond. :-)
~Joyce Scarbrough
Very cool, loved it! Can't wait for more.
And now the other cops are going to send him for a psych eval...
I love the direction this story is taking, Chelle.
Wow, this is really cool. She can make a difference now. Great snippet.
It's convenient that the person who can see her can do something--but now I wonder how they're connected. And why.
Interesting snippet. I'm curious to know why Dave is able to see and hear her.
What a bizarre situation it must be for him. Very intriguing story. I'm loving this.
That would have freaked me out big time. Loved its
Very interesting! I love the paranormal twist. :-)
Getting more interesting all the time. Cheering for Dave and the girl!
Like the way this is going, great snippet. Can't wait for the next snippet.
I like it! I need to read more, Chelle. :-)
I love how they're both so surprised they can see each other but others can't! These two are going to end up intertwined for sure. Now I wonder if he's going to take her advice or begin to think he's lost his mind. Hopefully the others won't think he's lost him mind or we all know what that will mean for him.
So he is special too, awesome. I hope he'll meet the fully visible version of her soon.
Post a Comment