Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday round. Every week writers post 8-to-10 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.
A long, long time ago I shared a few snippets from my Paranormal Romantic Suspense, Karma Visited (only 5) - and we didn't get a full taste of this story. Since I am working on a sequel and revisiting the story for myself, I'm sharing more with you and soaking up your comments.
Do you believe in karma? Annie Furman has a gift that allows her, while she sleeps, to visit people in their time of need - but who will be there for her when she needs help? Undersheriff Dave Turner is investigating a series of home invasions and homicides. He has no idea that solving this case will lead him to the woman of his dreams.
With only paperwork left after rescuing the young girl and arresting the remaining kidnapper, Dave is left alone with his thoughts...
Creative editing alert! Here are seven lines...
Normally Dave would be excited about
breaking a case, but he was still confused by what he had seen that morning. He
couldn’t get his mind off of the pretty lady who literally vanished in front of
his eyes, at least he thought she did. Maybe he was just losing his mind?
Once more he wondered if they had
played a joke on him; it had to be a joke because if it wasn’t then something
definitely wasn’t right in his head. They had been awake all night following
leads; he was tired and seeing things that weren’t there, it was just a
hallucination. He continued to repeat those words in hopes of believing it.
The only thing Dave knew for sure was
that he wanted to see her again.
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My life changed after I died.
It’s not like I had any special powers.
They just didn’t understand me.
They underestimated me.
I had a gift.
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In light of the violence and senseless deaths in America in recent weeks,
I keep repeating a few lines from John Donne's famous poem:
No man is an island,
Entire of itself.
Each is a piece of the continent,
A part of the main.
If a clod be washed away by the sea,
Europe is the less.
As well as if a promontory were.
As well as if a manor of thine own
Or of thine friend's were.
Each man's death diminishes me,
For I am involved in mankind.
Therefore, send not to know
For whom the bell tolls,
It tolls for thee.
In light of the violence and senseless deaths in America in recent weeks,
I keep repeating a few lines from John Donne's famous poem:
No man is an island,
Entire of itself.
Each is a piece of the continent,
A part of the main.
If a clod be washed away by the sea,
Europe is the less.
As well as if a promontory were.
As well as if a manor of thine own
Or of thine friend's were.
Each man's death diminishes me,
For I am involved in mankind.
Therefore, send not to know
For whom the bell tolls,
It tolls for thee.
21 comments:
Sounds like he's getting in deeper than he knows yet. Good snippet, Chelle. :)
I hope he gets to see her again and get an explanation.
"She's just an hallucination." But he wants to see her again. I think he really is overtired!
At least he knows he wants to "see" her again and not running scared. :D
Oh, Dave! I love how he's trying to rationalize what he saw, at the same time he wants to see her again. Great excerpt!
Wonderful snippet. The cross between reality and what this new reality is becomes fascinating.
Love the twists in this story Chelle. Dave is not the only one having problems working out what's going on. But at least he is intrigued...
Love the twists in this story Chelle. Dave is not the only one having problems working out what's going on. But at least he is intrigued...
Poor Dave sounds really confused. And tired. It would definitely be hard to believe what he saw!
This is another nice development in an intriguing story. I like the premise, Chelle.
I can't wait see what happens when Dave finds out what's going on! Editing note: "Once more he wondered if they had played a joke on him." To which 'they' are you referring?
Thinks he's losing his mind, but why not lose it over seeing her again. Love it. :)
I like that he's trying to find a rational explanation. This is such a good story, Chelle!
He's starting to look forward to seeing her! I'd call that a first step toward acceptance.
I don't think I'd want to see her again. I don't like it when people just disappear in front of me, LOL. The excerpt was nice though. It gave me that hold your breath feeling.
Ha! I think he's just contradicting himself just a little there. He hopes it's a hallucination, yet he wants to see her again... Hmm... Someone is going to get themselves into a pickle with those two sides of the same coin. I like he tries to logically rule it out though, as any normal person probably would. Except me, but I know I'm not normal. LOL.
Dave can keep repeating the words to himself all he wants, but I don't think that'll make them come true! :-)
The contrast between him trying to convince himself she wasn't there and wanting to see her again is a perfect description of his confusion. He'll work it out, I'm sure. :)
Is good that he is open to the possibility that she exists even if he also think she might not.
Awww how sweet. Another great snippet.
TRying to find a reasonable explanation when there might be none... At least he wants to see her and not run for the hills!
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