Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday round. Every week writers post 8-to-10 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.
A long, long time ago I shared a few snippets from my Paranormal Romantic Suspense, Karma Visited (only 5) - and we didn't get a full taste of this story. Since I am working on a sequel and revisiting the story for myself, I'm sharing more with you and soaking up your comments.
Do you believe in karma? Annie Furman has a gift that allows her, while she sleeps, to visit people in their time of need - but who will be there for her when she needs help? Undersheriff Dave Turner is investigating a series of home invasions and homicides. He has no idea that solving this case will lead him to the woman of his dreams.
Annie gets an unexpected visit from Sherry Pulaski, a local town activist and someon who Scott has not hidden his dislike..
Creative editing alert! Here are seven lines...
Sherry Pulaski walked into the house without invitation, “we
need to talk, do you by any chance have a pot of coffee up?”
Scott had made his feelings about this woman very clear and
told her not to involve herself in any of Pulaski’s causes.
Sherry was filling the coffee pot with water as Annie reached
the kitchen door.
“Honey, your hubby wants to run for a position on our little
ol’ town board, he keeps avoiding me so I need you to catch his ear.”
“I really don’t get involved with politics, Sherry,” Scott
wouldn’t listen to her anyway.
“What this power company is looking to do is criminal, you
know what everyone has always said about electrical fields — they cause cancer
and other health problems.”
Sherry kept rambling, “the property that they wanted was too
expensive, folks were living there who had no intention of selling, but now a
lot of these people are being forced to move out for this mall.”
Sherry looked at Annie’s puzzled expression, “your husband is
one of the investors of the mall project.”
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My life changed after I died.
It’s not like I had any special powers.
They just didn’t understand me.
They underestimated me.
I had a gift.
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15 comments:
This marriage doesn't sound like much of an equal partnership.
Her husband is evidently up to no good. She needs to dump him.
This situation is just getting worse and worse for poor Annie. It must be painful to have people assume she can influence her husband.
Seems as if Annie's husband isn't such a good guy. Karma may get him! Enjoyed the exxcerpt...
No wonder Scott didn't want her talking to Sherry and finding out what he's doing behind her back.
~Joyce Scarbrough
Seriously bad husband so she better watch out for him and his cronies.
Her husband doesn't sound like an upstanding citizen. Great snippet. :)
Hubby doesn't talk things over with her much, does he?
This is not a visitor who listens very well... but maybe this information will help aid in the escape from this marriage!
He's what now? Ha! Oh! This is going to be a roller coaster of a conversation! Personally I can't stand the personality of Sherry, those types of people always just rub me the wrong way. But this is going to prove very interesting now. I still wonder why Annie doesn't just leave Scott with how unhappy she seems.
Did she just reveal something she shouldn't have?
That Scott was a real piece of work. Karma was pretty satisfying. ;-)
Her husband has a lot to answer for...
This is going to be interesting ... wonder how she'll confront her husband... if at all.
Ouch. Not a good way to find out.
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