Saturday, April 9, 2016

The breakfast table ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 04/10/16

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A long, long time ago I shared a few snippets from my Paranormal Romantic Suspense, Karma Visited (only 5) - and we didn't get a full taste of this story. Since I am working on a sequel and revisiting the story for myself, I'm sharing more with you and soaking up your comments.

Do you believe in karma? Annie Furman has a gift that allows her, while she sleeps, to visit people in their time of need - but who will be there for her when she needs help? Undersheriff Dave Turner is investigating a series of home invasions and homicides. He has no idea that solving this case will lead him to the woman of his dreams.

This is the next morning at the breakfast table, Annie spent most of the night cowering in the bathroom after her nightmare of the girl dying in a burning apartment.

Creative editing alert!  Here are ten lines... 


Scott bit into his English muffin and chewed loudly, “what were you doing in the bathroom all night?”
She noted that there was no concern in his voice, he was annoyed that she had disturbed him.
“I… had a bit of a stomach ache,” she lied.
Shortly after they were married she had one of her nightmares, Scott offered comfort up until the point she trusted him enough to tell him about her belief that the dreams were real, then he laughed at her instead of listening.
At Scott’s insistence his mother moved in with them a few months later, he told his mother about the dreams, they both laughed at her.
He looked at her over his coffee cup, “you better not be coming down with anything, I expect you at that fundraiser tonight no matter what.”
Scott was running for a seat on the town council; he wanted his future constituents to see an ideal marriage, a devoted family man and adoring wife. He demanded she participate in this deception or he would reveal her mental problems and have her institutionalized.
“Don’t forget to make those cupcakes,” Scott drained his cup of coffee and then made a face, “I’m lucky no one expects you to make the coffee, this is crap.”

She reminded herself that she was just biding her time, she just had to find a way out before he could stop her and lock her away, if she failed she knew she would never get another chance.

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My life changed after I died.
It’s not like I had any special powers.
They just didn’t understand me.
They underestimated me.
I had a gift.

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It's #NationalUnicornDay

"The unicorn is a legendary creature that has been described since antiquity as a beast
with a large, pointed, spiraling 
horn
 projecting from its forehead." (Wikipedia)

Unicorns are traditionally associated with magic, dreams and possibilities. It is said to be a magical animal that walks between invisibility and visibility, it's beneficent and healing, and it is a strong, powerful animal. If you are lucky enough to be one of the rare individuals to see a unicorn, you are inspired to find your own purpose and meaning, you will be guided towards your destiny. A unicorn will challenge you to put aside your fears and your limitations and go beyond what you even knew you could do. Even when you don't realize that the unicorn is there, you will suddenly find meaning in the symbols in your life and that will be the unicorn's doing. The unicorn will help you find balance and peace in your life.

Here's a picture to help you find YOUR unicorn today...

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22 comments:

Teresa Cypher said...

Oh boy--Scott is a real peach of guy! I hope she gets away from him.

Linda said...

Wow, what did she ever like in the guy? I would totally run away, really, really fast.

T. M. Hunter said...

Scott seems like he should go take a long walk off a short pier. Ugh...such an awful guy.

Siobhan Muir said...

He's a piece of work. Good snippet, Chelle.

Peter Vialls said...

I agree with the others about Scott. Doesn't sound like his mother is any better. The sooner she gets out of that relationship, the better! Good snippet - if somewhat chilling!

The Belle in Blue said...

OMG, a husband like that and then she has to live with her MIL too? I hope things change for her soon. Great snippet!

~Joyce Scarbrough

Amy Braun said...

Wow. What a jerk. Hope she finds someone better!

Charmaine Gordon said...

Scott and his mother-what a team. Annie's in big trouble with no one on her side. She will have to find a way OUT!

Veronica Scott said...

Uh oh, I don't like Scott or his mother - they need some karma to visit them, I think! Intriguing excerpt, can't wait to read more. I love the heroine!

Kim Magennis said...

Well done Chelle! I am so invested in your Annie. Hate the husband and MIL!

Kim Magennis said...

Well done Chelle! I am so invested in your Annie. Hate the husband and MIL!

Author, Neva Rodriguez said...

Wow, very realistic problems between these two. Hoping Annie can find comfort in her dreams, doesn't sound like her reality is all that hot. Great writing Chelle!

P.T.Wyant said...

Ugh! Why did she ever marry that guy? He sounds emotionally abusive.

Ed Hoornaert said...

It sounds to me as though she's trying to create a bit of karma -- for him!

Jennifer Powell Reynolds said...

Well, he's a giant douche. I think the quicker she gets out of there the better. Great snippet.

Christina Ochs said...

Poor Annie! Sounds like she's stuck in an awful marriage, on top of the nightmares.

Elizabeth Alsobrooks said...

Well I'm not voting for him! LOL!

Caitlin Stern said...

I'm sure he can be charming when he wants to be, but now that he's let his guard down, he's a definite monster. Hope she escapes him, because I bet he's worse when thwarted!

Rachel Sanderson said...

Boy I do not like Scott!! He makes my skin crawl!! Well done :-)

Iris B said...

Oh wow, he's a handful all right ... can't wait to find out how his arrogance, his mother, and her "sight" come into play.

Emmy Gatrell said...

What an ass. Great snippet.

Daelyn Morgana said...

Wow... I hate this dude. Self-centered, bossy prick. (Whoops, sorry, that just slipped out!) My heart aches for her and I hope this plan she is brewing works, I wouldn't want to think what would happen if it failed based on those theories.