Saturday, February 20, 2016

When Mama Talks ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 02/21/16

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I am sharing snippets from a new short story I wrote, Always One More Time. This story has just been released in a terrific anthology called HeartWorks ~ Eight Great Stories of Love, Passion, and Romance from Vanilla Heart Publishing Authors Charmaine Gordon, Paul Zunckel, Chelle Cordero, Neva Squires-Rodriguez, Lauren Shiro, Tamara Philip, Gwendolyn Jensen-Woodard, and Angela Kay Austin.
  

Callie met some opposition when she told the truth about her relationship with Jimmy. Rest assured there is more to come, a lot more will be disclosed next week.

Creative editing alert!  Here are ten lines... 


“Leisha you shut your mouth,” Mrs. Bernerd yelled at her daughter. She turned back to Callie, “now girl, why are you coming here to tell me that my son had some kind of dalliance with you?”
Lawrence sounded suspicious, “are you trying to blackmail us or something?”
“I,” Callie looked nervously between the three, “I just,” she began to hyperventilate.
Leisha strutted towards Callie and pointed her finger, “she probably wants to claim that the black guy forced her.”
Mrs. Bernerd noticed that Callie was having difficulty breathing, “you sit girl and catch your breath then we will talk.” The older woman stood, “Leisha, Lawrence, I am an old woman in mourning for a son, I am not feeble and I don’t need your interference”
“But Mama, she’s—” Lawrence tried to plead with his mother.
“I said to stay out of it, we do not know what she is or what she wants, you are to stay out of it; I will hear her out and I will be the one to make the decision what to do about her.” She stopped and looked at each of her offspring, there was complete silence, “you can stay in the room, but if I hear a single breath from any one of you, you will leave; is that understood?”


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Have enough courage to trust love
one more time.
And always, one more time.

Maya Angelo

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Eight Great Stories of Love, Passion, and Romance
from Vanilla Heart Publishing Authors

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HeartWorks

Gleason’s Greetings

by Charmaine Gordon
 Liz Gleason brings laughter and joy into the neighborhood when she opens a card shop. Designing her own humorous greeting cards, business booms and romance blossoms. Is it all too soon when a TV producer shows interest in Liz and her shop? 

Ń Boer maak ń Plan

(A Love Story) by Paul Zunckel
Piet van Zyl finds himself like a fish out of water on meeting the lovely Peggy. The man that will stand down a charging buffalo…the man who is never without a quick chirp…the man, who has an answer for everything has finally met his match…now he is out of his depth, for cupid was around and his arrow hit the burly South African dead center. 

Always, One More Time

by Chelle Cordero
Disowned by her parents because of an interracial love affair, Callie Sanders is left alone to raise her son after his father, Jimmy Bernerd, dies fighting in a war on the other side of the world. Desperate to give her son a family she goes to the Bernerd household — what she finds is a second chance at love, acceptance, and family.  

The Fourteenth Floorboard

by Neva Squires-Rodriguez
Valentine’s Day uncovers a new world hidden in her home that no one, including Gabriela, can understand.  Not even scratching her own arm helps Gabriela understand that this place is real, and part of the reason is that she uncovers a secret bigger than life itself.  Her family tries to convince her to never go to this place again, but Gabriela soon learns for herself, the price associated with getting her there, and that some things are better left unknown.  

Love, Upside Down

by Lauren Shiro
Chantal is sure of two things: her general contracting business, and her love for her old flame, Desiree. A serious car accident changes everything, causing her to stop working; and she meets someone new in Grace, a friend of a friend who becomes her care giver. This accident turns her world upside down, even her love.  

Feeding Romance

by Tamara Philip
 Excerpts from Tamara’s award-winning debut novel, The Trouble with Playing Cupid  along with the recipes for delicious meals the lovers feed each other along the way, including December’s Favorite Buttermilk Pancakes, Tom’s Creamy Pasta Primavera for Two, and Cupid’s Hot Chocolate (guaranteed to inspire love and adoration from all who drink it).  

Heart of Night

A Nightlife Short Story by Gwendolyn Jensen-Woodard
 Lady Jannessa Guillory was the daughter of an ambassador, and therefore it was her duty to marry to her station, and to help her father. Yet, the night called to her in such a way she couldn’t deny it. And when a voice found her in the dark, she knew she couldn’t stop her own passions. 

Sweets for Your Sweet

by Angela Kay Austin
Excerpts from Angela’s Sweet Victory, along with the recipes for a few of the sweet treats Victoria makes after her move back home to Memphis – and too near to Chad. Includes Sweet Victory itself: a delightful chocolate no-bake treasure of coconut and pecans, and Victoria’s favorite comfort food – baked macaroni and cheese. 

16 comments:

Kim Magennis said...

I love Mrs Bernard already, Chelle.
looking forward to reading much more!

Cara Bristol said...

Lot of family drama it sounds like.

Charmaine Gordon said...

Chelle, I read the story and what a story it is so full of drama and love, I couldn't put it down.

Naomi Shaw said...

Mrs Bernard is great. She certainly wants to get out of Callie the reason for her visit. Great snippet

Bonnie Gill said...

I love how patient Mrs Bernerd is. Now I want to find out what Callie has to say.

Veronica Scott said...

Well the older woman is fierce and sure rules the roost but I like her! I sense some big revelation coming from your heroine...I'm very intrigued. Great snippet!

Ed Hoornaert said...

Good -- Mamma has taken control of a wild and unpleasant situation.

Caitlin Stern said...

Yeah, you need to listen before you jump to conclusions. How else will you know what she's going to say?

PT said...

Something tells me she's not someone you want to mess with.

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Love Mrs. Bernerd's voice. I can hear it so clearly. I'm glad she's going to hear the poor girl out. I'm interested in hearing what Callie has to say, too.

Linda said...

Good parenting job. I wonder what the hell is wrong with her kids, I mean on top on losing their brother.

Iris B said...

REally like Mrs Bernard. Well done.

The Belle in Blue said...

You tell 'em, Mama! Great snippet. :-)

~Joyce Scarbrough

Jennifer Powell Reynolds said...

His mother is a strong woman. Great snippet. :)

dmorgana said...

Really liking Mrs. Bernard's character! She sounds like a strong, independent woman who's not afraid to be heard, and you don't want to push the wrong buttons on. Poor girl though, she's so flustered and nervous, I hope this goes alright for her. Nice snippet.

Cecilia Corona said...

Applause! Great snippet.