Saturday, February 13, 2016

She's more than a friend ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 02/14/16

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I am sharing snippets from a new short story I wrote, Always One More Time. This story has just been released in a terrific anthology called HeartWorks ~ Eight Great Stories of Love, Passion, and Romance from Vanilla Heart Publishing Authors Charmaine Gordon, Paul Zunckel, Chelle Cordero, Neva Squires-Rodriguez, Lauren Shiro, Tamara Philip, Gwendolyn Jensen-Woodard, and Angela Kay Austin.

  

Last week Callie introduced herself to Jimmy's mother as a "friend". The last line was "How did you know my Jimmy, girl?"

Creative editing alert!  Here are ten lines... 


He came in where I work, I do intake at the V.A., he had to come in for a physical.”
“Oh,” The woman’s expression changed when Callie mentioned the Veterans’ Hospital, “he died over there…”
Callie felt her throat clench, “I know, I’m sorry that I missed the funeral service, I didn’t find out —”
Lawrence stepped in, “We tried to contact all of his friends, sorry, we didn’t know about you.”
She looked down to hide her tears, “I realize that.”
“You poor child,” Mrs. Bernerd took her hand again, “to find out your friend has died and no one even let you know. It is so sweet of you to come to pay your respects.”
“Mrs. Bernerd,” Callie was hesitant, “Jimmy and I weren’t just… friends, we… we were together.”
“Oh hell no,” the young woman on the couch sprang to her feet angrily, “my brother dating a white woman? You’re lying.”



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Have enough courage to trust love
one more time.
And always, one more time.

Maya Angelo

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I love a good, romantic story any day!

Wishing you a wonderful day & the making of terrific memories.


Just for fun,
a bit of


v 110 million roses, mostly red ones, will be sold and delivered within a three-day time period.
v Valentine’s Day is the big time of year for red roses. Mother’s Day sees more pastel-colored roses sold.
v Most roses sold on Valentine’s Day in the U.S. are imported from South America.
v 15% of American women send themselves flowers on Valentine’s Day.
v About 1 billion Valentine’s Day cards are exchanged each year.
v About 25% of Valentine’s Day cards are funny.
v Hallmark, the famous card company, makes over 1,330 different cards for Valentine’s Day.
v More than 35 million heart-shaped boxes of chocolate will be sold for Valentine’s Day.
v In the U.S., 64% of men don’t make plans in advance for a romantic Valentine’s Day with their sweethearts.
About 3% of pet owners will give Valentine’s Day gifts to their pets.


17 comments:

PT said...

I don't think she knows her brother as well as she thinks she does.

Teresa Cypher said...

Wow--that last line! Good snippet, Chelle!

Thanks for all the V-day stats. Interesting. :-)

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Well isn't this interesting. She didn't know your brother too well, did she?

Iris B said...

Oh ... that last line. A bit of a twist here ?

Kim Magennis said...

That is interesting. They were an item, yet she missed the funeral. Hmmm!

Kim Magennis said...

That is interesting. They were an item, yet she missed the funeral. Hmmm!

Charmaine Gordon said...

Beyond wonderful, Chelle. You brought me right into the room with her.

Veronica Scott said...

I have a feeling Callie has more to tell them so the sister might as well sit down and prepare herself. Great snippet!

Christina Ochs said...

Poor girl, to miss the funeral of the guy you were dating, and then get more grief from his family!

Caitlin Stern said...

With an attitude like that, no wonder they didn't know about her. If race is such an issue, who would tell their family unless they had to?

Siobhan Muir said...

Oh man, that'll do it. Great snippet, Chelle.

Ed Hoornaert said...

Great situation, Chelle. Not only is she grieving her lover, she faces retroactive family antagonism, too. Poor girl.

dmorgana said...

Plot twist! And it's finally revealed why she's so nervous and torn apart. Great snippet, I'm enjoying this story.

The Belle in Blue said...

So much to wonder about here. I'm hooked! Hope you share more next week.

~Joyce Scarbrough

Jennifer Powell Reynolds said...

Poor girl. I wonder about any other surprises she might have for the family. Great snippet. :)

Emmy Gatrell said...

I didn't see that coming. Great snippet!

Linda said...

Wow, that last line totally changes the tone of the snippet, I didn't see that coming.