Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday round. Every week writers post 8-to-10 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.
A long, long time ago I shared a few snippets from my Paranormal Romantic Suspense, Karma Visited (only 5) - and we didn't get a full taste of this story. Since I am working on a sequel and revisiting the story for myself, I'm sharing more with you and soaking up your comments.
Do you believe in karma? Annie Furman has a gift that allows her, while she sleeps, to visit people in their time of need - but who will be there for her when she needs help? Undersheriff Dave Turner is investigating a series of home invasions and homicides. He has no idea that solving this case will lead him to the woman of his dreams.
Two weeks ago (sorry I missed last week) Annie overheard her husband plotting "something" in the town, but she doesn't know the specifics yet. That night while sleeping she has another dream of a disaster, this time there are children to be saved. Frantically she wakes and tries to piece together clues in order to help.
Creative editing alert! Here are ten lines...
Do you believe in karma? Annie Furman has a gift that allows her, while she sleeps, to visit people in their time of need - but who will be there for her when she needs help? Undersheriff Dave Turner is investigating a series of home invasions and homicides. He has no idea that solving this case will lead him to the woman of his dreams.
Two weeks ago (sorry I missed last week) Annie overheard her husband plotting "something" in the town, but she doesn't know the specifics yet. That night while sleeping she has another dream of a disaster, this time there are children to be saved. Frantically she wakes and tries to piece together clues in order to help.
Creative editing alert! Here are ten lines...
She stared at the
ceiling and tried to remember everything she had seen. The license plate on the
crashed car was the same color as hers, and it was nighttime… there was a
number by the highway.
She closed her
eyes and focused on the memory as hard as she could. When Annie was sure she
had enough information, she got out of bed and left the room to use the
computer.
It worked, Annie was
elated, it was the first time Annie had been able to do something to help.
After she made
the phone call she forced herself back into her dream and watched while the
first responders removed the parents’ bodies from the car. They had to in order
to reach the children in the back. The toddler was still unconscious. The baby
reached towards her again, but no one else could see her standing there.
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My life changed after I died.
It’s not like I had any special powers.
They just didn’t understand me.
They underestimated me.
I had a gift.
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It's Passover!
Yes, I missed last week, mea culpa, but I didn't get things posted early enough before I had to go offline. This week I will be back to read and all by Sunday.
But the holiday (which will have just ended by the time this snippet posts) has been absolutely wonderful - I wrote about it this past Monday on this blog
(go see Moments of Memories ~ #MondayBlogs)
One thing that always strikes me odd is that the first few days of the holiday are always so frantic and with two Seders there seems to be so much to the holiday. And then, once the Seders are over, the rest of this 8-day holiday just flies by. Even with holiday cooking, it goes so quickly.
(go see Moments of Memories ~ #MondayBlogs)
One thing that always strikes me odd is that the first few days of the holiday are always so frantic and with two Seders there seems to be so much to the holiday. And then, once the Seders are over, the rest of this 8-day holiday just flies by. Even with holiday cooking, it goes so quickly.
Passover has always been my favorite holiday, I love the total transformation of my kitchen (special dishes, cookware, flatware and more that are used only this one week each year). /when I was just a child growing up I never knew exactly how much work it took since my mom and dad took care of most of it - now it falls on my shoulders (hubby and kids do help), but it is totally worth it.
What is YOUR favorite holiday and what makes that one so unique?
11 comments:
Wow, what an unusual gift. It's an interesting concept and to think the toddler can see her, but no one else can. Cool.
Wow, that was powerful! I really enjoyed this snippet, especially where she forces herself back into the dream. It sounds like she's really getting control of her gift. Great picture of your family also. Take care!
There is a delicate balance here that comes across beautifully. Her daytime reality versus her dreamtime reality. The latter is coming more into focus and the latter is blurring...
Nicely done Chelle! I really love the premise of this story.
It's good that she can finally help but I wonder what made it possible. I hope they're all going to be ok.
Interesting that the toddler sees her - that was a great detail, gave me goosebumps. Loved the excerpt!
Chilling and mysterious! I'm glad she found a way to use her gift.
I'm delighted that she was able to influence her dream events. Good for her. I'll bet she sleeps better knowing she doesn't have to be only a witness to disaster.
As for your question, my favorite holiday is without question Christmas, largely because it's the one time of year my family is together. My four children have scattered across two continents and three nations, with none of them within 1500 miles of each other -- but they come home for Christmas
Riveting sequence of events...enjoyed the read.
Ooh, that last bit about the toddler gave me chills!
How wonderful to be able to save something from the wreck that is her life. Now if she can only save herself!
What a fantastic gift to have. Thanks for sharing.
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