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Justin was feeling totally frustrated because of Layne's reaction to his announcement and he went back to his motel room to brood and hopefully give her some time to cool down. He wasn't a man who was used to being told no and right now all he was thinking about was how this situation complicated his life. (Don't worry, he may be spoiled, but he really isn't as heartless as he thinks he is...) This snippet has been edited to fit, even though we're permitted up to 10 I am still aiming for 8 so I don't feel guilty when I go over.
...and now the
"Damn it,"
Justin paced the short length of his motel room; this little nothing town was
one of the last places he wanted to be. Damn Davis for insisting that he had to
"get this matter cleared up", damn his brother for leaving him the
only heir, and damn his grandfather for dying and dumping everything on his
shoulders.
After a rocky start Justin
had been a model student for years until he earned his master's degree, he
drank only moderately and partied occasionally. There had been a few college
girls he saw on a serious level, but he never got carried away; he never made
promises and he never once thought of a future with any of them. That was why
he was so surprised when the family attorney, Larry Davis, told him he was a
father.
"That's
impossible," Justin protested, "I was always very careful. If some
girl told you it's mine, don't believe it." He had always been a careful
and considerate lover and when it came time to end a relationship, he always
did it gently. He'd bet his life he never got any girl pregnant.
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Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son.
Justin, the victim of a fraternity prank, and Layne, the subject of a forced insemination, have produced a beautiful child that they are both willing to protect… at all costs.
The two parents realize they can love each other, but when Layne’s abusive “ex-husband” shows up, they are torn apart by danger, kidnapping and lies. Justin won’t give up until Layne is returned to him. Layne uses her newfound strength, courage and knowledge to defy Charlie’s ugliest demands.
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18 comments:
Ah, now we get the story from his side...but I gotta admit, getting this story in 8 sentence dribbles really makes me want to know what the heck is going on here.
Great snippet -- I like getting a bit more inside his head.
Agree with the others. Interesting to find out a bit more about him.
Hmmm. Not a nice place to be. Can't wait for this to unfold. Thanks for sharing.
Ooh, Justin sounds very frustrated in this snippet. I'm wondering, that last sentence has me thinking he is actually is doubting whether or not he has kids. Interesting. I love it!!!
I'm wondering how the lawyer knew about the insemination. Medical records are tough to crack.
Unless Justin was being closely watched and someone tagged the sample . . . or her husband did something underhanded and the sample was tagged that way?
Hum, this is an interesting point of view. I wonder if he is just going to back away or get through a test.
They'll get through this, but it won't be easy. Poor guy. Poor all three of them actually.
He's on the horns of a dilemma. Outstanding snippet, Chelle. He know who he is so what the hey!
He'll bet his life, but not the family business? Good snippet, Chelle. :)
Lives are always complicated when lawyers are involved hehe Great snippet, I'm dying to know what's going on!
Accidents happen even to the most careful of people; it sounds like both Layne and Justin are in awkward places.
Great snippet. Lots going on!
I like this story. Can't wait to read more.
The story just gets more and more intriguing with each snippet. I like this guy so far! Another excellent excerpt.
I must admit I wonder if his "gentle" break-ups felt that way to the ones being dumped, but I'm sure he tried.
Nice work... you pack a lot of information and background into a very short space.
Interesting snippet. He seems pretty darn sure he never fathered a child.
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