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True confession time. Over coffee Dini tells Seth about her humiliation at being left at the altar. Then she asks him about his community service...
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(the following may have been creatively edited to fit) ...and now the
“I
got drunk one night, got into a fight, and tore up the bar a bit. I don’t have
a drinking problem.”
She
stared at him for a split second, “I didn’t ask.”
“I
just wanted you to know. I recently returned from Iraq, I spent six years in
the service and just got discharged… honorably.”
Dini
wasn’t sure what to say, “Welcome home, thank you for your service.”
Seth swallowed a laugh.
“Sure didn’t feel like a welcome home. Everything was different.”
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Dini didn’t want to think about her past. And, Seth wasn’t thinking about anything but his past. Thrown together as Santa and his Number One Elf at the homeless shelter, Dini and Seth seem to be on opposite sides... of everything. Her past is catching up to her, and Seth may risk his future to protect her.
Believing in Santa
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9 comments:
Yes, after six years a lot changes. I hope he'll adjust soon, without tearing up any more bars.
Very delicately put Chelle. I reckon a lot of vets feel their return is strange by how they have been changed. Enjoyed this dialogue. Thank you!
Very delicately put Chelle. I reckon a lot of vets feel their return is strange by how they have been changed. Enjoyed this dialogue. Thank you!
Interesting conversation they're having but it rings true. Well done excerpt!
He does have a good explanation after all. Which doesn't mean he's ready to date--he might need a therapist. But he's looking like a much better option now.
Oh, yeah, things change. It would be so hard to come home and have to adjust because in your mind home is exactly like you left it.
Nice job with the exchange, Chelle. The wanting to connect and awkwardness of answering what hasn't been asked and responding with "thank you for your service" is very authentic.
The privilege of war time and the scars it leaves. Nice exchange. I'm sure this will be a fine story.
Wow, this was really subtle but really powerful all in one go. Things are never the same after returning home from war, and for some it's worse than others. Very interesting snippet!
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