Saturday, November 7, 2015

Dini pulls away - Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 11/08/15

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For the next few weeks I'll be sharing snippets from my 2015 holiday-themed short story     Believing in Santa 

Dini becomes more distant when Seth seems to get flirtatious. Saved by Santa's sleigh being loaded and ready to go, Dini manages to brush him off... for now. 

  (the following may have been creatively edited to fit)  ...and now the eight nine:



“By the way, my name isn’t really Santa.”

Dini feigned surprise, “I’m shocked!”

“It looks like we have to get on our way,” without waiting, she headed for the door.

He made sure to take the seat next to her in the van; Dini buckled herself in and quietly stared out the window, looking away from him.

“My name is Seth.”

She turned and nodded and then went back to staring out the window.

“May I ask your name?”

After a moment she turned back to him with a sweet smile that never reached her eyes, “they call me Elf Number One.”


She really didn’t want to make any new friends and especially not with a guy who seemed interested in her.


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Dini didn’t want to think about her past. And, Seth wasn’t thinking about anything but his past. Thrown together as Santa and his Number One Elf at the homeless shelter, Dini and Seth seem to be on opposite sides... of everything. Her past is catching up to her, and Seth may risk his future to protect her. 

Believing in Santa

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Sincere thank you to all of our Veterans


Wednesday, November 11, 2015 is Veterans Day in the United States
It's a time to honor the service our brave military has given us.

In my story, Believing in Santa, Seth is an Iraq/Afghanistan vet
and so I dedicate this week's snippet to all of the brave men and women
who have protected our shores. 

"a day to be dedicated to the cause of world peace and to be
thereafter
celebrated and known as 'Armistice Day'."
(1938 Congressional Act)

17 comments:

Kim Magennis said...

Icy! I wonder if she is going to regret her unfriendliness? Even without your blurb, you sense she is protecting herself

Kim Magennis said...

Icy! I wonder if she is going to regret her unfriendliness? Even without your blurb, you sense she is protecting herself

Teresa Cypher said...

Oh my, Santa has his work cut out for him! :-) Good snippet, Chelle!

Ed Hoornaert said...

Elf number one, eh? Maybe he should call her Elfy for short.

dmorgana said...

Haha, I'm agreeing with Ed on that comment. I want to know the story behind why she doesn't want anymore friends that are interested in her. There's a story behind that.

Author, Neva Rodriguez said...

Ha! Elf number one. Great response. Love your Veterans images as well. Enjoy your week!

Charmaine Gordon said...

Fun story ahead as they plow through giving gifts.

Caitlin Stern said...

He's trying. Maybe he'll win her over? She's stuck with him for a while, after all.

Jennifer Reynolds said...

Despite how pissy she is, this scene is pretty funny between the my name isn't Santa and the they call me elf number one. :) :) :)

Veronica Scott said...

I liked the dialog and loved her answer to him as to her name - quick thinking! Great snippet.

diannehartsock said...

Cute! Wonder if she's going to thaw to him. He seems fun.

Cecilia Corona said...

Oh snap. Great snippet. Want to read more!

Elaine Cantrell said...

I hope Santa is ready for a challenge.

Elaine Cantrell said...

I hope Santa is ready for a challenge.

PT said...

Ouch! He's going to get freezer burn sitting next to her.

Iris Blobel said...

Oh ... can't wait to read how he's going to crack her!

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Interesting snippet. I want to know the story behind why she doesn't want anymore friends to be interested in her.