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Last week Justin confronted Layne with his bombshell announcement. When the boy appears behind his mother, she yells at him and demands that he lock himself in his bedroom, meanwhile she attempts to prevent Justin from barging in. Layne’s son is named Dennis. (btw, a reference to nosy neighbors was edited out last week)
...and now the eight:
She
slowly turned her head to look at a photograph of Dennis that was sitting on
the top of her television set and made the comparison to the man standing in
front of her.
Suddenly
she screamed at him and began to beat at his chest with her clenched fists,
"Get out, get out of here, get the hell out of my home!"
"Layne,
calm down," Justin tried to defend himself from her blows; he grabbed at
her hands and tried to hold the struggling woman away from him.
He
heard a door open.
"Should
I call the police, Layne," Mrs. Addamson called across the hallway from
the protection of her own doorway.
Justin
wanted to see the boy again, he wanted this beautiful lunatic to stop attacking
him, he didn't want to have to call his lawyer to get him out of jail.
"I'll be back," Justin turned on his heel and left. Mrs. Addamson
slammed her door as he entered the hallway.
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About Common Bond, Tangled Hearts
Layne Gillette’s world is turned upside down when a man she has never met shows up to lay claim as the father of her 6-year old son.
Justin, the victim of a fraternity prank, and Layne, the subject of a forced insemination, have produced a beautiful child that they are both willing to protect… at all costs.
The two parents realize they can love each other, but when Layne’s abusive “ex-husband” shows up, they are torn apart by danger, kidnapping and lies. Justin won’t give up until Layne is returned to him. Layne uses her newfound strength, courage and knowledge to defy Charlie’s ugliest demands.
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Amazon Customer Review
Two people brought together through a very interesting twist. They have a very passionate love affair, lots of suspense and satisfying ending.
17 comments:
Great premise and potential for conflict is right there! Looking good.
Ooh, what is going on with Layne? Love the tension and I hope she calms down enough to tell him what's going on. Great eight! Happy Mother's Day Chelle!
What did he think was going to happen?
Perfect excerpt for Mother's Day, Chelle! :)
I'm not sure it's fair to call her crazy--he did just spring it on her, what did he think would happen? A hug?
A prank causes this to happen? Some joke. Exciting, Chelle with conflict right from the beginning.
I think Justin has good sense. I hope Layne can calm down - I get why she's so upset but she'll never be able to cope with this if she doesn't get a handle on her emotions. Very effective excerpt!
Intriguing situation going on here.
I love this plot. So interesting.
Love it. I hope she'll calm down for them to have a talk.
He better have a good explanation if he wants to convince her. Good snippet, Chelle. :)
Great tension in this scene! I'm not sure she's ready to calm down yet. :)
Very vivid! Rough stuff and easy to follow. The pace works too.
Great scene. But, yeah, I think he should have thought things out a bit more before barging into her life.
mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm Chelle!!
POKING HEAD UP, JUST BACK FROM JAMICA AND WASING THROUGH MESSAGES
OOPS!!
LINDA B
Wow, talk about a heart-wrenching surprise. Emotional scene.
Her behavior felt very real, Chelle. This must be terrifying for her--to have her son's father walk back into their lives. Nicely done! :-)
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