Saturday, November 29, 2014

At First Glance - Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 11/30/14

Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior round. Every week writers post 8 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.

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I'm continuing with snippets from The Meeting, a part of The Many Faces of Chelle Cordero, a short-story collection which exemplifies (I hope) the diversity of my writing.

The story begins at a Charleston SC train station in 1942. America, still reeling from the Pearl Harbor attack, entered the war and soldiers in uniform were going off to Europe and the Pacific to fight. Life continued on the home-front.

Last week two young ladies, both Southern born and bred, were saying a tearful good-bye at the train station. A young MP riding in another car was about to step onto the platform.


It felt good to stretch his legs as he stepped down from the train onto the platform. He watched as two women tearfully hugged each other and found himself unable to stop staring at the woman left on the platform. She was beautiful.
He lit his cigarette and took a drag and then walked over to the woman.
Jeannette was aware of the soldier‘s stare and tried not to let it affect her. He was a handsome man, but it just wasn‘t polite to be scrutinized so thoroughly like that. He came even closer and she tried to look in the other direction.
           “Hello.”

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The Meeting
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11 comments:

Charmaine Gordon said...

You grabbed me from the first sentence and didn't let me go. I was in the station watching the scene. Chelle, your many faces captured me.

Millie Burns said...

You bounce from his thoughts to her thoughts in this snippet. Do you do that throughout the story? I want to know who is saying goodbye to whom and why...

Chelle Cordero said...

Thanks Charmaine!

Hi Millie, I have to go back and re-read the story with the POV in mind. As for the goodbye, last week's snippet was a conversation between Jeannette and her friend - her friend is going to take care of an ill mother. Thanks for the heads up.

tinachristopherauthor.com said...

Intriguing set-up. I wonder why Jeanette doesn't walk away. Her friend is on the train, so she could leave, but she isn't...Great 8.

Veronica Scott said...

And meanwhile I'm wondering what's going on with the prisoner from last week, so obviously this story has my attention all the way! Enjoyed the snippet, felt like I was right there, watching them!

caitlinsternwrites said...

Though he probably means well, I can well understand her unease at his approaching her. He better have something good to say if he doesn't want to scare her off!

Catherine Winther said...

There is so much more I want to know! Very enigmatic piece and already a great sense of tension between the two protagonists. Wonderful

Author, Neva Rodriguez said...

Hi Chelle! I like the tension that you created here. Jeanette seems intrigued by this guy. Great eight!

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Felt like I was right there. I guess looking away wasn't going to stop him from talking to her. lol

Meka James said...

The solider is very bold with the staring and then walking up to her. All it takes is a simple hello. Looking forward to seeing if they complete the conversation or if something happens with the prisoner.

Teresa Cypher said...

It left me wondering what happens next--and that's a good thing. :-)

I caught the head-hopping, too. A wee bit disorienting, but maybe it's just me. It didn't seem to phase any of the other readers.

Good story, Chelle!