Saturday, December 19, 2015

Just a tourist ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 12/20/15

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I'm sharing snippets from Stormy Weather, one of the short stories in The Many Faces of Chelle Cordero collection. 

Last week a handsome stranger had just called Debbie a tourist...

Here are ten more lines... 

Debbie stood, she deliberately avoided his help, “Is that an insult?”
“No,” Adonis’ twin laughed, “it was a guess. This is obviously your first hurricane and since we have them every year I figured that you’re either a brand new resident or, most probably, just visiting for a few days, so which is it?”
She didn’t look up at him, “I’m here on vacation.”
“Hah, I was right.”
Debbie looked out at the horizon, “How bad does it get?” It almost looked like sets of black curtains were billowing from the clouds. She walked back to her towel and straw bag and just assumed he’d follow her.

“Oh baby,” he paused while she bent to pick her things up, “it hasn’t even started. The storm is still pretty far off, besides it’s only a category two.”
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The Many Faces of Chelle Cordero is a single author collection of short stories featuring Introduction, Pussycat Tails, Holiday Happiness, Not Alone, I Swear That Raccoon Just Knocked on the Door, Stormy Weather, A Mother’s Love, More Than a Friend, The Meeting, The Vacation and a special bonus section.

Stormy Weather
The ominous skies and howling winds of a hurricane lead to an unexpected and warmhearted friendship.


Wishing everyone a wonderful holiday whichever one you might be observing, this week is host to a few:

Happy Winter Solstice

Merry Christmas

Happy Kwanzaa

It's a wonderful time of the year!


Anonymous said...

The phrase "Any port in a storm" sprang into my mind. I'm sure he wont be "any port", though, but the right port.

Linda said...

That sounds like fun. Better go hide somewhere dry.

Iris B said...

His words wouldn't mean anything to me ... and two doesn't sound like much ... look forward to reading more.

Teresa Cypher said...

Good dialogue, Chelle. After the last snippet, I wasn't sure I liked him. But his personality is starting to shine through. He sounds enthusiastic about the storm--is he the surfer who is enjoying the BIG waves? Nice job!

I've been kind of hit or miss for the last month, so I think I missed wishing you a happy Hanukkah. I hope it was wonderful. :-)

Stephanie said...

It hasn't even started - I wonder if this means more than the storm. ;-) Great snippet. I am certainly intrigued to find out what happens next.

Charmaine Gordon said...

Oh those Florida hurricanes! I like the way they are inching toward each other during stormy weather.

The Belle in Blue said...

Category two--we in southern Alabama wouldn't even go buy Vienna sausages for that! ;-) But it does offer the potential for some "storm struggling"! Great snippet.

~Joyce Scarbrough

Elaine Cantrell said...

Lots of different levels here. Nicely done.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Lots of different levels here. Nicely done.

Veronica Scott said...

I've never been in a hurricane, so I'm right there with your heroine. Great snippet!

Unknown said...

He doesn't seem too concerned about the storm. He might be right, or he might be very wrong...

PT said...

Am I the only one wondering about that "Oh, baby" as she bent over? And the ensuing pause? I'm thinking they're an indication that he likes what he sees...

JTsuruoka said...

Good stuff. I'm really liking the setting this scene in the moments before a storm hits. It speeds things up and adds a note of urgency to it.