Showing posts with label . Final Sin. Show all posts
Showing posts with label . Final Sin. Show all posts

Saturday, October 29, 2016

Let's go paintballing ~ SNIPPET SUNDAY, Oct. 29-30, 2016

Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday round. Every week writers post 8-to-10 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.

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I'm sharing snippets from HYPHEMA, my second EMS novel. The hero in HYPHEMA was first introduced in Final Sin as the heroine's ambulance partner and best friend.

Matt Garratti, a paramedic from New York, moves his wife and son to North Carolina to work at his dream job as a flight medic. Pakistani born Sudah, his wife, receives frosty stares and insensitive comments from their new neighbors… Matt wonders if he is pursuing his dream or bringing his family into a nightmare from which they may never wake.

Matt and his co-workers talk at a get together, it will be the first time Matt's new co-workers will be meeting his wife.

Creative editing (a.k.a. condensed to fit) alert!    

“Hey guys,” Frankie spoke up, “how’z about some paintball this weekend, it’ll be a good chance for Matt and his wife to meet the crowd.”
"Ginny and I won't be able to make it, sorry guys, her folks are coming down," Big John waved off the beginnings of a protest, "but you four go ahead; besides this way we can save the best for last, Ginny and I will meet Matt's wife some other time."
Matt shrugged, “I’d have to make sure we can get a sitter for the baby.”
“My daughter will do it,” Little John made the offer.
“Thanks, I’ll speak to Sudah.”
Frankie leaned forward, “what kind of name is Sudah?”
“She’s from Pakistan.”
“Sounds exotic,” Little John raised his eyebrows comically, “she pretty?”
Matt nodded.
“Looking forward to meeting her.”


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REVIEWS
 5 stars Nobody Writes It Better by Charmaine Gordon

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Believing in Santa

A Holiday Short Story

 by Chelle Cordero

Dini didn’t want to think about her past. And, Seth wasn’t thinking about anything but his past. Thrown together as Santa and his Number One Elf at the homeless shelter, Dini and Seth seem to be on opposite sides… of everything. Her past is catching up to her, and Seth may risk his future to protect her.
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Saturday, October 22, 2016

Laughter in the crew room ~ SNIPPET SUNDAY, Oct. 22-23, 2016

Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday round. Every week writers post 8-to-10 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.

See more at the
Facebook Snippet Sunday group
& check out the
WeWriWa blog


I'm sharing snippets from HYPHEMA, my second EMS novel. The hero in HYPHEMA was first introduced in Final Sin as the heroine's ambulance partner and best friend.

Matt Garratti, a paramedic from New York, moves his wife and son to North Carolina to work at his dream job as a flight medic. Pakistani born Sudah, his wife, receives frosty stares and insensitive comments from their new neighbors… Matt wonders if he is pursuing his dream or bringing his family into a nightmare from which they may never wake.

Matt and his partner come into an ongoing conversation in the EMS crew room, there's lots of laughter over a call another crew just took. (note: EMS humor is often a way to relieve the tension of the job)

Creative editing (a.k.a. condensed to fit) alert!    

“Wee-oh, talk about somebody from the dead coming back and biting you in the ass,” the crew room was filled with laughter as Matt and Tony walked in, “when I called it into the hospital I said that there were two patients but the other one refused medical assistance.”
Tony offered Matt a can of soda from the counter, “what’s going on?”
Little John answered between chuckles, “Big John and I were dispatched to a one car M.V.A., the guy didn’t hit anything, the car was just sitting there in the middle of the road. Seems a dog ran out in front of him and he hit the brakes, well the dog got away, but the guy in the back comes forward and hits him in the back of his seat.”
“And this is the best part,” Big John guffawed, “the patient was driving a delivery truck for the funeral home, the guy in the back was a stiff in a body bag!”
“I really wanted to check the vitals on the guy in the bag, but with my luck I would’ve unzipped the bag and the stiff would have sat up.”
“I wonder if we could have collected on two patients.”
“I mean the driver definitely got hurt, he really got hit in the back hard, but I want to hear how he explains that injury to his friends.”


  
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Saturday, October 15, 2016

A chilly morning ~ #SnippetSunday 10/16/2016

Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday round. Every week writers post 8-to-10 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.

See more at the
Facebook Snippet Sunday group
& check out the
WeWriWa blog


I'm sharing snippets from HYPHEMA, my second EMS novel. The hero in HYPHEMA was first introduced in Final Sin as the heroine's ambulance partner and best friend.

Matt Garratti, a paramedic from New York, moves his wife and son to North Carolina to work at his dream job as a flight medic. Pakistani born Sudah, his wife, receives frosty stares and insensitive comments from their new neighbors… Matt wonders if he is pursuing his dream or bringing his family into a nightmare from which they may never wake.

Matt is dressed and ready for work - just a bit of conversation between him and his wife..

Creative editing (a.k.a. condensed to fit) alert!  Here are Ten lines...  

Damn that’s good. The hot coffee sliding down his gullet was welcomed to ward off the chilly morning, Matt stared out the kitchen window and noticed droplets of ice crystals against the pane, it was early and still dark outside.
Delicate brown arms wound around his waist.
“Sorry, I didn’t mean to wake you,” Matt covered both of his wife’s hands with one of his own; maybe it was the early spring chill in the air, but he really wanted to crawl back into bed with her.
“I wanted to be awake with you,” Sudah snuggled under his arm and slid against his body until she was facing him. She gently ran a hand up the crisp uniform shirt until she touched his shield, “You look so handsome in your uniform, I am very proud to be married to such a hero.”
Matt chuckled, Sudah never missed an opportunity to praise him and bolster his ego, “I love you, do you want me to light the stove for you before I leave, it’ll help warm the place up a bit.”
“No, I will take care of it later if I need to, I do not want to leave it burning until I am ready to be in here.”
Matt loved the old wood stove that sat in the corner of the kitchen, it threw heat into the living area and was great defense against the early morning dampness.
She looked at the clock and reminded him that he had to get going if he was to get to work on time.
  

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For more WeWriWa Snippets, go to: 

REVIEWS
 5 stars Nobody Writes It Better by Charmaine Gordon
four-starsI would read another one of her stories by Marcia
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 (this snippet is being re-posted since the link wasn't available last week)
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Saturday, October 8, 2016

A chilly morning ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 10/09/16

Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday round. Every week writers post 8-to-10 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.

See more at the
WeWriWa blog
& check out the
Facebook Snippet Sunday group


I'm sharing snippets from HYPHEMA, my second EMS novel. The hero in HYPHEMA was first introduced in Final Sin as the heroine's ambulance partner and best friend.

Matt Garratti, a paramedic from New York, moves his wife and son to North Carolina to work at his dream job as a flight medic. Pakistani born Sudah, his wife, receives frosty stares and insensitive comments from their new neighbors… Matt wonders if he is pursuing his dream or bringing his family into a nightmare from which they may never wake.

Matt is dressed and ready for work - just a bit of conversation between him and his wife..

Creative editing (a.k.a. condensed to fit) alert!  Here are Ten lines...  

Damn that’s good. The hot coffee sliding down his gullet was welcomed to ward off the chilly morning, Matt stared out the kitchen window and noticed droplets of ice crystals against the pane, it was early and still dark outside.
Delicate brown arms wound around his waist.
“Sorry, I didn’t mean to wake you,” Matt covered both of his wife’s hands with one of his own; maybe it was the early spring chill in the air, but he really wanted to crawl back into bed with her.
“I wanted to be awake with you,” Sudah snuggled under his arm and slid against his body until she was facing him. She gently ran a hand up the crisp uniform shirt until she touched his shield, “You look so handsome in your uniform, I am very proud to be married to such a hero.”
Matt chuckled, Sudah never missed an opportunity to praise him and bolster his ego, “I love you, do you want me to light the stove for you before I leave, it’ll help warm the place up a bit.”
“No, I will take care of it later if I need to, I do not want to leave it burning until I am ready to be in here.”
Matt loved the old wood stove that sat in the corner of the kitchen, it threw heat into the living area and was great defense against the early morning dampness.
She looked at the clock and reminded him that he had to get going if he was to get to work on time.
  

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Saturday, September 24, 2016

A dream job? ~ Weekend Writing Warriors / #8sunday / 09/25/16

Okay, even though I had this posted last week somehow I must have messed up entering the link, I thiught I did, but when I looked (after the Linky List was closed) I saw it wasn't there — and alas, NO comments. So I am entering this link AGAIN this week, I'll just make sure it actually posts.
Whether you observe Rosh Hashanah or not, L'Shanah Tovah, May you be inscribed for a good year.
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Hi! Welcome to another Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday round. Every week writers post 8-to-10 sentences on their blogs from a published or unpublished book. Then we "hop" around and leave comments on each other's snippets. Whether our work is already published or in progress, the helpful comments help us become stronger writers on our next WIP. We welcome EVERYONE's comments.

See more at the
WeWriWa blog
& check out the
Facebook Snippet Sunday group


I'm sharing snippets from HYPHEMA, my second EMS novel. The hero in HYPHEMA was first introduced in Final Sin as the heroine's ambulance partner and best friend.

Matt Garratti, a paramedic from New York, moves his wife and son to North Carolina to work at his dream job as a flight medic. Pakistani born Sudah, his wife, receives frosty stares and insensitive comments from their new neighbors… Matt wonders if he is pursuing his dream or bringing his family into a nightmare from which they may never wake.

This snippet is from the end of the short prologue. Tony is the medical chopper pilot, Frank is a critical care flight nurse. (btw, my apologies, I had a lot going on this week, I'll do double time to get to your snippets this week) An LZ is a Landing Zone.

Creative editing (a.k.a. condensed to fit) alert!  Here are Eight lines...  

The LZ was lit up on the grounds of the hospital and Tony was preparing to put the chopper down. Matt and Frank remained quiet, all three men were communicating through the headsets in their helmets; the sound of the rotor above them would have made it too noisy to talk otherwise.
It was still his first week in the new job and only his second living in the area. It amazed him that Sudah was so supportive even though he practically yanked her and the baby from New York. She stood by him, never questioning his decision and saying goodbye to their friends without even a tear. He was going to do everything he could to make sure this worked.

Matt felt the EC 145 bank hard to the right as Tony brought the bird around. His harness held him securely in the seat, he smiled as he watched the landscape grow bigger and realized that he was finally in his dream job.

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REVIEWS
 5 stars Nobody Writes It Better by Charmaine Gordon
four-starsI would read another one of her stories by Marcia
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What's It Like to be a Paramedic?


Being a Paramedic, an EMT, or any emergency first responder can be euphoric when a call goes well. There is probably nothing greater than delivering a healthy baby, bringing someone "back" when their heart had stopped, or pulling someone from a disastrous car wreck, packaging her the best you can because she has no more feeling in her legs, and hearing that she walked down her wedding aisle just six months later.

Being a first responder can also be devastating when you hear a child's last breath, have to pronounce a young mother who collapsed in front of her children, or get literally pounded on by a grieving family member while you are doing CPR and knowing he's not coming back.

While both of my EMS novels, Final Sin and Hyphema, are works of fiction, many of the emergency scenes are "real" and so are the emotional highs and lows. I dedicate both stories to the heroic devotion of all first responders.



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